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In the Gloaming
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In the Gloaming |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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In the Gloaming Opening new this page, a day, where sky is smoky gray and moving and seagulls slant within the curve of listening surge of weather pushed and dripping still upon impression. I long for sun and sky of blue so night will bring this full moon now, that has been cast aside to bloom behind the gloaming. Imagine how it does beguile and turn the cumulous to glow, and there, a stage lit by candle, a star emerges thus, to sing behind her flowing, where wind has loosened the dark strands slant and cast them silver much like lover's whisper. Catch me now between you, oh cloud and moon, and I will dance across you thus and melt into dream’s delightful. For you see I wither here lost from beam across bare shoulder, covered in gown of cotton white and wanting only spring. And yet, your wet touched splendor has dressed the ground in green, and all around you bloom with jasmine that fills the night in me with longing coming through my heart of window. So dripping still on my impression my song has lifted and felt the rapture of each day that brings in wonder an opening new to page of time. -------- 3-01 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah..a little roaming in the gloaming sweet Martie. This is splendid! Perfectly lovely...and much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Opening new this page, a day, where sky is smoky gray and moving and seagulls slant within the curve of listening surge of weather pushed and dripping still upon impression. Oooooooooo that phrase is so good... Your poetry is a wonder Martie, and I loved reading this. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"smoky gray and moving" I saw that tonight...a new page tomorrow I suppose. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
beautiful write as usual Martie... you capture nature well...and use the metaphors with perfection |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
the way you weave words is so fascinating, captivating! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Good poem... Very good.. Thank you for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I miss this feel... and you have opened a door [again]... bless your ever-lovin'! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Martie, This is my favorite of yours (so far) I especially like it. It is way beyond beautiful...it just glows! Love it! Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Martie this is beautiful, great flow and feel thank you for sharing these images with us raph |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now I understand what you said on the phone and yes, a strange happening that we saw In the Gloaming in music as well, as this literally sings to me Martie, but I wish you would post my favorite, pretty please? |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - Geez, how do you write these words like this all of the time? Just great... BC |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, once again you've painted a beautiful picture in my mind's eye.  I have no doubt that you will do it with your next poem, too....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Martie, this is so lovely, sweet friend, yay! (kiss on cheek) Your loving heart always gloams with such warmth and imagery, sweet friend, yay, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...a star emerges thus, to sing behind her flowing, where wind has loosened the dark strands slant and cast them silver... I want to dip my pen in your inkwell... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Goodness, you don't have the chills that run through me right now...and that is a good thing... This is beautiful... |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - the images you weave and the feellings you evoke are so special thanks for your wonderful poetry - Paul |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Hi Martie, how are you? I have enjoyed reading this poem. Is "cumulous" being used adjectivally or nominally?   |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Exquisite writing sweetMartie... Indeed a keepsake in my library dearPoetFriend... HugsNsmiles2uAlwaysDearPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Each new day is a gift from God indeed - Using it wisely is our challenge... Beautifully written, as ever, Martie.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Imagine how it does beguile and turn the cumulous to glow, and there, a stage lit by candle, a star emerges thus, to sing behind her flowing, lovely, Martie. This has a timeless feel to it, very romantic. Cor |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie~ I may be a little late getting here, but that doesn't mean I love this any less. This is such a beautiful write and so filled with the heart that is you. Big HUGS to you, friend, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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