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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-12-17 01:30 PM


Last winter I was distracted
             by raindrop shivers
Where willows      stood lonely
       in water--  golden color,
shape of rivers  revealing nature

In a reflection of memory
      you lift me--
                     held me--

I was washed --
             in gentle yearn

Where dark seas
      meet canvas

Painting the fall of soft song

Deep inside the stillness
........I can hear you speak
You're still an inspiration
........To me

© Copyright 2002 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-12-17 01:34 PM


"      you lift me--
                     held me--
I was washed --
             in gentle yearn

Where dark seas
      meet canvas

Painting the fall of soft song"

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Ooooh Lauren!!
This is SO beautiful!
Very lovely...wistful and so you!
~Hugs~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-12-17 01:34 PM






(smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, I have missed your gorgeous words so much, sweet friend, yay, you speak with such maple syrup grace here, may the warmth of the fall always sing in you and may the willows flower with bluebirds and butterflies! (kiss on cheek) I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-17-2002 01:35 PM).]

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3 posted 2002-12-17 02:07 PM


Lauren my dear friend, reading your words again is like having an extra Christmas blessing.  You have been missed dearly my sister of heart!  
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4 posted 2002-12-17 07:56 PM


Lauren,
That "soft song" touched my heart too. I much enjoyed, thanks.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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5 posted 2002-12-17 08:53 PM


Lauren
You sing a lovely soft song, enjoyed.

Bill Charles
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6 posted 2002-12-17 08:56 PM


Greeneyes - words I write cannot express your beautiful writings. So I say, 'as always...'

BC

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7 posted 2002-12-17 09:03 PM


Your words fall so softly......

~ May all your songs be as soft and beautiful as this poem

Linda

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8 posted 2002-12-17 10:07 PM


This was beautiful...gave me shivers.
ThisDiamond

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9 posted 2002-12-17 10:12 PM


enjoyed
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10 posted 2002-12-18 12:30 PM


You write with such grace and simple elegance~  


Hugs Lauren~

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11 posted 2002-12-18 12:33 PM


Lauren, you write the most beutiful poetry. I really enjoy reading it. Thank you.....    

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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12 posted 2002-12-18 01:26 AM


I've been distracted all my life...nice write!
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13 posted 2002-12-18 10:16 AM


nice..gentle flow...with a hint of sadness.

I enjoyed


Christopher
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14 posted 2002-12-18 11:22 AM


interesting. this is more impression than concrete, ache as opposed to descriptive. it makes you 'feel' what you're saying, instead of seeing it.

i like it!

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15 posted 2003-01-15 02:24 PM


Splendid writing GreenEyes...
Smiles2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

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16 posted 2003-01-15 04:17 PM


A soft song indeed, from one who knows the words.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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