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RSWells
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0 posted 2002-12-16 09:57 AM



My profit, eight hours sleep last night,
of late to dreams of sex I stray
in winter's Sun found not Miss Right
yet not to Mrs. Wrong fell prey

Not once intrudes reminder Moon
to fill my head of she whose sway
had changed love's song to looney tune
which throbs a hung o'er chienne apres

In drier air a lesser wrap
sufficient for a chilly wind,
today I fell not in the trap
of my past sins

This day I worked in better health
though modestly my time paid for
in sum of which I'll count as wealth
I did not feed our sons to war

© Copyright 2002 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2002-12-16 10:03 AM


Not once intrudes reminder Moon
to fill my head of she whose sway
had changed love's song to looney tune
which throbs a hung o'er chienne apres

I enjoyed it all, but this verse........my favorite.  Well done Richard.

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2 posted 2002-12-16 10:11 AM


Richard, I hope that there will be someone  in your life soon that you can have those good dreams about......  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

VAS
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3 posted 2002-12-16 10:18 AM


I like this! Especially that last stanza!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Martie
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4 posted 2002-12-16 10:27 AM


Richard

Introspective and honest and as always so well done..that last line is a zinger!

vlraynes
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5 posted 2002-12-16 06:50 PM



Richard~
I very much enjoyed reading this, and I have to
agree with Martie about the last line.  Well done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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6 posted 2002-12-16 06:57 PM


enjoyed it!

Charisma

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7 posted 2002-12-16 07:06 PM


I really liked this one, dear friend - I spent 10 years 'in limbo' until I met 'Miss Right'.   Sunnyone and I were (eventually!) married 2 weeks ago - and I promise you, when it is 'right', it is perfect and all those wasted hours, days, weeks, years are washed away in an instant.
I wish you peace and tranquility for the coming festive season, and health, wealth and happiness, in the New Year to come.
Kind thoughts
John

Someone who thinks logically provides a nice contrast to the real world.

Rusty
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8 posted 2002-12-16 07:59 PM


I like your style. Will definitely look for more of your work.

rusty

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9 posted 2002-12-17 01:52 AM


in certain poems, the last line is the one that always gets me, and this was one of them
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10 posted 2002-12-17 05:53 AM


"to thine own self be true"

This you manage to do in everything I read from you Richard.

You write with integrity of the moment, and I always enjoy the sharing of your inner vision.


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11 posted 2002-12-17 07:36 AM


a sense of peace in your words, and the ever-present honesty of you--enjoyed!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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12 posted 2002-12-17 11:55 AM


quote:
In drier air a lesser wrap
sufficient for a chilly wind,
today I fell not in the trap
of my past sins

This strikes me as fine parchment, picking up the oils of a finger's tip...


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13 posted 2002-12-17 01:27 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Richard, this is so heartfelt and captures the moment so well, sweet friend, I too wish for health and good spirits to guide you over the holidays, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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14 posted 2002-12-17 03:29 PM


RSWells
A walk on the mild side, enjoyed.

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15 posted 2002-12-17 03:44 PM


today I fell not in the trap
of my past sins
Avoiding the landmines is a basic survival technique.

MARK V SHELDON
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16 posted 2002-12-18 10:22 AM


Larger than most victories medalized...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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17 posted 2002-12-18 10:24 AM


yes ..perhaps small but I agree with Mark.


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