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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-12-16 04:05 AM


"Da lawd is gonna bless ya, chile.."
I squinted at him through the fence.
An old black man on knobby knees
leaned there on a grocery cart
filled with cans
that he'd picked up
(some of them were prob'ly MINE)
"My momma used to do the same..."
He wiped his head
and then
sun shined.

Through the clouds
peculiar ray
of light in stand
to cradle him...
I dropped the seedling
in my hand--
I knew
I was with child again.

The logic argued
in my brain--
he's just refracted
ray of rain.

His wrinkles leapt upon his face.
"Yep, da lawd will grant you grace."

And in this manner
prophets speak.

I named my boy
"Zachary"

for he is a gift from God.

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2002-12-16 04:26 AM


I love those accents! Great write, chile!
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2 posted 2002-12-16 04:52 AM


You know I love the poems written about people...

smile...

this is just the kind of thing I was looking for... easy to read and lots of depth too... grin... you do this so easily...

and?  love the ending....



I'll keep reading....

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3 posted 2002-12-16 04:56 AM


This is great!

I don't know where I'm running now, I'm just running on... ~ Jackson Browne

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4 posted 2002-12-16 06:36 AM



I had an uncle by marriage
who knew before I did...

this was wonderful!

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2002-12-16 07:52 AM


Ah. And you are blessed. Zach is all that and more!
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6 posted 2002-12-16 08:18 AM


Reminds me of "Willie", an old man that hung around the General Store.

Dispensing gems, while wearing his net worth.


Terrific writing


~yeti

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7 posted 2002-12-16 08:25 AM


serenity,
Well done, enjoyed.

sweetwater
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8 posted 2002-12-16 09:05 AM


His wrinkles leapt upon his face.
"Yep, da lawd will grant you grace."

And in this manner
prophets speak.
this reminded me of "the light coming on" and it was the point that I 'got' the poem... very nice.

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9 posted 2002-12-16 09:47 AM


Gozza shoa, no uns got nuffin. Wisdom from the alley.
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10 posted 2002-12-16 03:49 PM


Wow, gorgeous.. this is terrific and I lerrrve the accents

hugs

Maree.

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-12-17 06:17 AM


Dixie...thank you dear friend. You make me happy knowing you enjoy.

LP? It amazes me that you like my sh-tuff..grin. I value your opinion much, and this? Is actually a part of a series I've been writing about me and the sisters and the adventures we shared while living together as three--gasp--single women! (obviously a short lived slice o life)
Thank you m'friend.

Eagle? smiling now...this one I'll admit to be true. My life is filled with such weirdness. Hugs and laughs. Thank you for reading!

Kari? I knew each time, but I was in denial. I was actually planting a garden at the time, and the sun was shining while it rained, and I was sitting there feeling, well, fertile and up strolled the aluminum can prophet. (hmmm...methinks there's a better poem in there somewhere! and pssst...happy belated b'day!

Sharon? you know my boy, so you know. Thanks YOU. I'm prouder of both of my children every day, (and yes, there is one about Krista...smile, but you'll have to wait!) Love you lady.

Ed...This one came about after talking to bri...I owe ya'll both a debt of gratitude for listening to my ramblings while I dredge up the forgotten. You guys make me feel like my entire LIFE is poetry. Yeti hugs.

sy...the little man is not so little anymore. I'm amazed to look UP at him and remember this. Amazing stuff, life is.

sweetwater? gotta hug ya! I do try to layer my "reality" poems with undercurrent of a more universal understanding. Thank you for "getting" it!

Richard--always honored to know you've read me. I'll say it again, you write with courageous honesty, which is something I do strive for m'self. Thank you.

and oh my Luscious one! I am so happy to see you gracing the forum again, and delighted you continue to read me with such patience.
Thank you lovie! Your friendship is a gift as well.

Now...I should go read methinks. I've been rather neglectful and for that I apologize yet again.

I do love you good poet people!


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12 posted 2002-12-17 01:51 PM




(sigh) Oh Karen, this is lovely, sweet friend, I just love how you dedicate such lovely poetry to so many special people, every name has a meaning and every name is special! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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