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Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2002-12-15 11:18 PM

Balancing

These toes are whitened,
curled tightly over the ledge’s lip;
body tipped and expectant,
poised to tumble
until limp limbs collapse.

I’ll throw myself headlong
into your bracing winds,
fearing your feathers won’t hold me.

You boast of talents, tongues flicking
with something exquisitely close to pain;
leaving me to weep.

I’ll wear my anticipation visibly,
points of compass rising
hard and icy as stars.

Soon, you’ll drift from cloud to cloud,
hurt me with insincere visions.

You have the girth of the constellations
for a buoy,
but I know what it is
to fall.

© 2002 Core

[This message has been edited by Corinne (12-15-2002 11:23 PM).]

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2002-12-16 12:00 PM

Loved the original love the revision

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2002-12-16 03:18 AM

I am a Libra, and I know this well.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-12-16 06:45 AM

I had on my calendar a date...to ask you,
"how's it coming?"...
It was dated 12/26.
Thought I would go ahead and ask now...

just 'cuz...

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-12-16 09:46 AM

this is stronger...more bite to the words...and make me want to just give you hug...in case the feathers don't hold you...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-12-16 09:50 AM

Cor,
Good and thoughtful write, enjoyed.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-12-16 10:16 AM

(smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I love this! (kiss on cheek) Both versions are filled with so much grave and heart, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2002-12-16 12:43 PM

Thanks, Aenimal!

Thank you passing shadows - I know Libras well (no one myself, though).

Thank you, Sunshine! Well, a lot of irons in the fire, you know? Lots of projects going on simultaneously. How is yours coming along?

Cpat - I won't ever turn down a hug! Thank you!

thanks Sey!

Thanks as always, Noah!

Cor

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

8 posted 2002-12-16 06:44 PM

Corinne~
This is a well written and well expressed piece.
I much enjoyed the read.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2002-12-18 06:59 AM

Corinne...see that extra few irons in the fire? Mine are in there, too! LOL

They'll get done, the both of 'em!

Parker
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

10 posted 2002-12-19 03:33 AM

Hi sweet poet,

I hope this isn't a sign of unexpected changes. Great write anyway.

Parker

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