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Just Breathe |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Deep in my throat words caught and tangled wrenching gasping heaving just open up let them out just breathe just breathe like stones they lay upon my heart unspoken unwritten unwitting harbinger of passionless poetry just breathe just breathe Slamming down of gauntlet glove raging thoughts crying out in pain where is the voice I used to have? where is my song? where is my song? just breathe just breathe gasping in my anger stifled soul emotionless melody of emptiness I wish I could just breathe |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Ah, but they did come out when you sing! (smiles) You sing with such clarity and urgency in this, sweet friend, you always breathe and release with poetic exhalations, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
ommmmmmmm all together, just one cleansing breath, really , so much in something so simple and taken for granted |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poet deVine - just put your head back on a pillow, breath as a sigh, close your eyes and think thoughts of serenity... Best to you... BC |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
PDV This is NOT passionless...it is loud with breathing! Enjoyed! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon~ Agreeing with Martie here...this is definitely not passionless. A well-spoken and powerful write...nicely done.  Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sharon, I believe you just have, my friend. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
There they are! Your words at last. Just write! Just write! Ed |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
Ahhhhh This be a grand expression and with passion and truth! Wonderful flow of pen! Cher Poetry is: |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ sounds like a vivid nightmare- the feelings of tightness, phsyical, mental, and spiritual turmoil..created by an exhausting volume of thoughts and repressed emotions nightmares do end though hope ya feel better! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, friend, I do think we all felt the breeze of your breath in this.... thank you, lady...... "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Oh My... this is just what i feel and can see it now through your words. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for your kind words. Writers block is a horrible thing - there should be a magic elixir for it. But I guess the cure is to 'just breathe'....sigh. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Sharon, holy smokes!! I found myself holding my breath while I read this. Not only is this an excellent description of writer's block....but also how some of us feel during an anxiety attack. Well done!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
easy enough... but the you know you can't hold your breath just because there may be smoke in the air... nicely done....now breathe in...and let it out slowly... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This sparked my imagination, and changed my breathing. I love that about ~good poetry~! Enjoyed. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
There are short breath's of fear and excitement, long breath's of passion and release .... ... this was the combination of all, the breath of life, and it is catching!!! Excuse the pun .... but this was "just write". |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Yes, writer's block is quite scary when one is accustomed to the words flowing--oddly, they seem to flow again when we least expect it...you've captured the feeling so well--enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Fee Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 381Melbourne, Australia |
Hey Sharon, its sometimes the breaths we dont take that actually help us to breathe easier. Hugs, Fee Expressions, |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My breathing quickened with each line..and ... "where is my song?" ....I just read it! 'Tis excellent m'friend. enjoyed it very much Sharon. Maree  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Poet deVine~ Enjoyed. Sometime those words are so hard to find then other times they flow like the waters of a mountain stream...Paul " To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you " |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
You just have this way, of making me, I don't know, think. I think you are one of the most talented poeple at passions, and I mean it sincerely. Never be normal! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Splendid writing PoetFriend PDV... Thank you for this most enjoyed read... *~coco~* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you. You all give me the gift of a smile. Your kindness truly warms my heart. |
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