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It Came on Wing
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It Came on Wing |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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It Came on Wing It came on wing of air soft-tuned waif of thought loomed by mother’s willing knot and the minutes daring sky dark tossed Saying now is in between of see a place of dream and slanted time and if you open mind of eye past goodbye to winged caprice where peace holds eager at arms length you’ll see around the curve of grace the lovely of a missing face I know this thought is fulsome want and bids to see past seem of real to peel the skin between the strands such faith is hard sometimes to feel I’ve seen this bless of rip in fabric all stitched down with stretch elastic to leave the room of bright lit tone to find a song no not alone but filled with fabric cinched not severed between the clouds I’ve seen forever |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Around the curve of grace".. and "between the clouds... I've seen forever" Those are my favorite lines, Martie - Your work is always superb - so all I can do is hone in on a couple of really special lines - These are the ones...  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Agreed with Nan great lines |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Martie, this is such a soft and gentle memory. Your heart will hold onto that face and spirit forever. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie~ Yet another lovely write from your pen. I absolutely love this. Hugs,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Awwwwwwwwww, this is soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you are a very loving mother and friend with a golden heart! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is special, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful..beautiful..beautiful!! What a way to Open Forum 24!! Wonderful write sweet Martie. ~Hugs~ ~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - written from a warm heart, as always... BC |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Great lines....sheesh....great poem!! As only you can write....Without question.. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
As lovely as you are, sweetie The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
~lovely and lyrical, my dear~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Saying now is in between of see a place of dream and slanted time and if you open mind of eye past goodbye to winged caprice where peace holds eager at arms length you’ll see around the curve of grace the lovely of a missing face This lovely brought tears to my eyes, Martie... I am also missing a couple of lovely faces right now as I know you are May God bless you with a wonderful holiday and a time of joyous remembrance.  ~ peace, joy and many hugsLyra |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, I seem to have a hard time saying the right words to reply to your excellent poetry. It seems no words are ever sufficent enough to express what I feel from reading your poetry. (I may have told you this before...I can't remember if I have or not) Thank you so much for sharing your work with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know, I have a bit of a hard time finding the words too, like Ethel... |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Beautiful!..as always.. "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, it's there, if we just take time to peer... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Saying now is in between of see a place of dream and slanted time and if you open mind of eye past goodbye to winged caprice where peace holds eager at arms length you'll see around the curve of grace the lovely of a missing face I know this thought is fulsome want and bids to see past seem of real to peel the skin between the strands such faith is hard sometimes to feel ===================================== "winged caprice" ...that is an understatement when refering to this oh so lovely moment of inspire...your pen took flight with this butterfly moment... this is so beautiful Martie...thank you for the keeper...(IWIHWT)  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Holidays draw memories.......only the strongest can emote them as positives. This was strong. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
the sound play in this is terrific, such a marvelous texture woven well Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - such wonderful feelings and images and as always you take me away to view the soft yet vibrant visions your words evoke - just lovely - Paul |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Martie, Just beautiful and so soft..... my favorite line: "You'll see around the curve of grace" Enjoyed a great deal! Hugs and love, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Nan--thanks for letting me know your favorite lines..and appreciate your help yesterday. Aenimal--It's always a good idea to agree with Nan. Thanks! Midnite--I know and thank you for knowing too. Vicky--I'm glad you enjoyed my poem...thank you for letting me know. Noah--  Nancy--Thank you for three beautifuls! Bill--Takes one to know one. Barry--Thanks, my friend! Michael--What a nice thing to say...you're the best! GOlDsparklESS--I like those two L words...thank you. Lyra--So good to see you! Ethel--Believe me when I tell you....you say the right words! PS ...and so do you! Sandpiper--Thank you curtsy. Karilea--seems like I'm peering much of the time. Richard--Some memories are possitive...thanks for the read. Virginia--I'm pleased by your reply. Paul--It's always a pleasure to read your replies, my friend. Pat--I'm so glad you enjoyed...thanks! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I also love it when you rhyme lovely lady This is superb writing and I am adding it to my library. hugs Maree.  |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Such a visual expressed write. Creative.. rhythmically balanced. Love the read~ ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
*bump* |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and if you open mind of eye past goodbye to winged caprice where peace holds eager at arms length you’ll see around the curve of grace the lovely of a missing face I know this thought is fulsome want and bids to see past seem of real to peel the skin between the strands such faith is hard sometimes to feel You move so effortlessly from free verse to rhyme... but appreciating your form is difficult because your words simply seep through my pores and into my heart... the passengers are so captivating the vehicle garners little notice. *S* This is outstanding, Martie... every way I look at it, I see excellence. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ahhhhhh Martie! How so very beautifully you write... I am foreverly impressed... enjoyed the title, enjoyed the view, enjoyed the way you explored the images and enjoyed the words you chose to describe ... Thank you... Regards, Sudhir |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely gorgeous Martie. I have always loved your poetry and this is no less beautiful than any of the others...you are a true talent.  *Krista Knutson* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear friends...thank you for seeing something with me, that I thought I couldn't explain in words. |
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