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HippinTrippy
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0 posted 03-27-2010 04:22 PM       View Profile for HippinTrippy   Email HippinTrippy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HippinTrippy


I've got to keep my head up,
And look forward to my future.
What this new life of mine will bring,
I'm not entirely sure.

Theirs no more room in my heart for pain,
'Cause dwelling on negativity,
Leaves you with nothing positive to gain.

I have very conflicting thoughts,
About how I should view these things.
I want to forget about yesterday,
And focus on what tomarrow brings.

But can you truly forget your past,
Without losing who you are?
It seems to me it would be a waste,
To have fought this hard & come this far.

It seems to me I have gained so little,
And yet I feel I've lost so much.
I have to start looking back on negative experiences,
While keeping positivity in touch.

I must learn to take the good with the bad.
Learn to apreciate every step I have taken.
Only then can I feel content with where I am.
Only then will I feel enlightened & truly awakened.

In this case I cannot say this is my first step.
Though perhaps the first properly directed.
The first step among many,
Leading to my happiness perfected.

3/26/10

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

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Angel4aKing
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1 posted 05-22-2010 04:13 PM       View Profile for Angel4aKing   Email Angel4aKing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel4aKing

I really like this and cn definitely relate...btw welcome to piptalk.....    

~~~kingsangel~~~

HippinTrippy
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2 posted 11-27-2010 09:11 PM       View Profile for HippinTrippy   Email HippinTrippy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HippinTrippy

Thank you very much. Unfortunetly I havn't written anything positive since..
Prats
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3 posted 12-16-2010 09:16 AM       View Profile for Prats   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Prats

This is a wonderful poem... i luvd it...

Prats!!! :D

pyre
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4 posted 12-16-2010 02:38 PM       View Profile for pyre   Email pyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pyre

Perhaps in the 2nd stanza that only has 3 lines the 1st line could have been "I've seen and I've heard all the trama of this world" and then the 2nd line could have started with something like the word "But"... Its a good poem, but I saw tomorrow was misspelled.  And all the stanzas have 4 lines except the 2nd.  Just a thought... Nice work.

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

HippinTrippy
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5 posted 12-16-2010 09:21 PM       View Profile for HippinTrippy   Email HippinTrippy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HippinTrippy

Thank you Prats, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~ Pyre, I apreciate your criticism, I recognized that the second stanza was off one line, but the message I wanted to send was very clear so I left it.
Thanks again for your thoughts.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.
Deep Blue
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6 posted 12-20-2010 05:12 PM       View Profile for Deep Blue   Email Deep Blue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deep Blue

Nice poem. No we can never truly forget the past, for what transpired has shaped us into who we are. We must however leave certain traits behind, like our negativity and destructive impulses. These forces only prevent us from developing our true character and keep us blocked from moving forward in life.

Josh
HippinTrippy
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7 posted 12-21-2010 12:36 PM       View Profile for HippinTrippy   Email HippinTrippy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HippinTrippy

Thank you Josh
~ Very well said =)

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

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