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faeriemythc
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0 posted 06-27-2009 10:43 AM       View Profile for faeriemythc   Email faeriemythc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for faeriemythc

This is my first attempt at posting on here.  Let me know what you think.

The Beauty of...

The beauty of a mountain
as the sun touches it's face.

The beauty of a rose
as the dew falls into place.

The beauty of a child's laughter
as it rings out true and clear.

The beauty of a loved one
as a hug draws you near.

The beauty of a parent
with  eyes so loving kind.

The beauty of all these things
can fill your heart and mind.

The beauty of the world
can never quite compare,

To the beauty of God's love
as you lift your hands in prayer.

aka Carmen

© Copyright 2009 Carmen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-27-2009 03:02 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

Again, welcome to PiP.

I think that the message of this poem is sweet and pure.  The poem, itself, flows beautifully.  It sounds like a child's prayer to me - and that is beautiful.

Alison
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2 posted 06-27-2009 10:29 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Beautifully and sincerely penned.
Hugs and welcome~Nancy

Life isn't about how to survive the storm...
But how to dance in the rain.

rockbabe
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3 posted 07-01-2009 08:52 AM       View Profile for rockbabe   Email rockbabe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rockbabe

Beautiful Yes
Margherita
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Eternity


4 posted 07-01-2009 09:59 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

This is very lovely. I believe God expresses Himself through all the beauty of His creation, humanity included of course.

Love,
Margherita
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5 posted 08-11-2009 09:42 AM       View Profile for jjbreunig3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jjbreunig3's Home Page   View IP for jjbreunig3

A lovely piece; I would suggest that you make "4 line" stanzas, seeing that you are rhyming the even numbered lines. Also spelling is important, it's should be its. The contraction it's represents "it is". --Joe

Logic, when applied to people, fails miserably! --Joseph J. Breunig 3rd

 
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