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Kheya
New Member

since 2007-12-26

Posts 9
Florida

0 posted 2007-12-27 08:32 PM

Just an alternate view of Eve and what may have driven her...

So you think you know me?
Bone of your bone, flesh of your flesh?
Brought to life from your rib.
Born of you
Created from you
Made for you
You are beloved of God and I your shadow.
An afterthought in the symphony of creation.
Do you think I have no thoughts of my own?
No hunger to know, what is out there, beyond you
Believe you—that I live for you
Breathe for you
Die for you?
You who have experienced everything first
Leaving me nothing to conquer, nothing to share.

Am I to be always second and never first?

The garden stifles me,
Always the same, never changing, eternal,
I sit day after day after day,
Looking at the hill
Looking at the tree
Seeing the one thing he has not known first
It’s majesty calls to me,
Chaste, never knowing the touch of a man,
Standing haughty and alone
Over looking the garden,
Warden, watcher, ruler,
It fires my brain.

I yearn for it like a lover’s embrace.
During the night I dream, dream of it,
During the day,
Mesmerized I watch it, I mark its growth
The ruby fruits dangle temptingly barely out of my reach.
Standing on my toes,
I brush the smooth waxen skin, cool against my fingertips.
Not yielding like the peaches and plums,
Firm, hard, mysterious…..
I reach…
It calls to me….

Kheya
It is queer how it is always one's virtues and not one's vices that precipitate one into disaster.-Surtee

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2007-12-28 06:05 PM

it was beautiful. umm i never did think of it quiet like that, but in your quest to poetize Mother Eve you quite forgot her breathing vice and undoing- one called Serpent.

-Kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

Kheya
New Member

since 2007-12-26

Posts 9
Florida

2 posted 2007-12-29 04:24 PM

Thanks for your comment---but I purposly left out the serpent---wanted to focus on what she might be thinking before he showed up or even depending on your interpretation the thoughts he put in her head...

Kheya
It is queer how it is always one's virtues and not one's vices that precipitate one into disaster.-Surtee

Tom Zart
Senior Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 682

3 posted 2008-01-20 11:59 AM

A well composed passion for the freedom to think for yourself poem.

Tom Zart

notwritten
Junior Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 10

4 posted 2008-02-20 09:39 PM

Very good and very thoughtfull.

matronmedusa
Member

since 2008-03-08

Posts 89
Alabama, USA

5 posted 2008-03-09 12:33 PM

Freedom of choice; it's a beautiful thing. I would rather die knowing I chose to...than to live because I am told to.

starpower
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 82
Utah

6 posted 2008-03-15 01:06 AM

That was a wonderful poem and I love it and it has a spot in my heart

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