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Hyaunt
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since 2007-07-12
Posts 74


0 posted 2007-07-19 02:15 AM


Brother J and Keed

Brother J,
You take my sisters and brothers there
Why not me?

Because
Keed, you have not been behaving well

Why?
I took care of them carefully
And I have screamed again and again
Try to bring them to safety.
When you come back for the promised trip
I want them to come gladly  with me.

Keed,
You did not cook for them when they are hungry  
You did not listen to them when they are hurt
You beat them up and enjoy your neighbor’s applause
You have no tears when they are suffering
You scream at them to make them fall from trees
And you did not comfort them when they broken their knees.

But Brother J,
I don’t have other blessing
My only skill is preaching

Keed,
Loudly you claimed that I love you
Then you know what love is at all
Why not love your sibling as I told
but you leave them out in burning hot
And also in frozen cold.

I see not that you love them
With gentleness, in meekness.
You teach them this and that, indeed,
But you show no care and softness

You coursed them to death
You chased them to lions mouth
I see no a humble heart
I see no a loving soul
And remember,
Who is going to come with me
It is not up to you to judge  

Brother J, but I want to go with you.

I never knew you
Depart from me.


(Always a lesson to me)



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Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725
California
1 posted 2007-07-20 05:37 PM



Hyaunt,

Welcome to Passions



I really liked the exchange of words between Keed and Brother J and I also liked what I read as a slight variation of language and culture. Both made the poem so much more engaging and interesting. I thought your poem made some very strong points and taught some very important lessons. Your poem reminded me that not all of those who say "Lord, Lord" will enter into the Kingdom. Sometimes it's hard to remember that we can be or maybe even are Keeds ourselves and can become so busy being the preacher or teacher that we neglect our lives and the true plan that God has for us (i.e. to Love one another). I thought that your poem made it very clear that we do need to be very very aware of how we live our lives.

Again, Welcome, God bless you, and I really enjoyed reading your poem.

-Bob



Hyaunt
Member
since 2007-07-12
Posts 74

2 posted 2007-07-20 05:53 PM


Thank you dear Lighthousebob

have a wonderful weekend!!

may God bless you


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