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kif kif
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0 posted 2006-06-26 09:17 AM


My love is like an astro-car,
endless drive, a religion.
To find a place beyond this arc,
I head for nous, and wave to God.

My passenger through distant stars,
who guides me through the Universe.
To open-sky initiation,
in mystic form, I will go far

out of time, to find the answer;
what's the truth behind the dark?


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Lighthousebob
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1 posted 2006-06-26 01:43 PM


kif kif,

Your poem is a most clever and enjoyable journey in reading and a most inquisitive search for the truth and soul of the universe.

God bless.

-Bob


kif kif
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2 posted 2006-06-27 05:53 AM


Thanks Bob. I was unsure about posting this here, as I've not made many comments in Spiritual, but there's nowhere else for it!

That said, I'd still welcome critisism.

Onelove

Lighthousebob
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3 posted 2006-07-14 04:57 PM


kif kif,

I do agree with you that this forum was the right place for you to post your poem and, though I don't feel critical of your poem in anyway, I do welcome and am encouraged by your fresh perspective expressed here.

-Bob

kif kif
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4 posted 2006-07-15 06:46 AM


Aw, thanks, Bob. We're expressing the same love-for something greater than ourselves. At first, I was put off posting here, because I have a different style for expressing God, and sometimes, my writing can be misinterpreted. I think this forum could help me with clarity, but you've got to be honest! I appreciate your time.  
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