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skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

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Beneath the northern stars

0 posted 2006-06-21 02:45 PM

Lord of all, God of all,
Cleanse me from my sin.
Purify my spirit
And heal me within.
Grant me Your forgiveness
For all the wrong I've done
Help me to walk along your path
And be more like your Son.

Lord of all, God of all,
Send to me your peace.
Heal my weary spirit
And may it never cease,
So daily I'll remember
That I'm always in Your care
And all my trials you'll see me through
For You're forever there.

Lord of all, God of all,
Fill me with Your love
That I may share with others
This glory from above.
Let your love forever be
Shining in my heart
That all may see You live within
And You I may impart.

I have a question....when I use adjectives in reference to God (i.e. Your peace, Your love) am I supposed to capitalize Your, since it is replacing the name of God? I started to do that, but stopped because I used those phrases so many times and it looked odd. If you know what is proper here and could fill me in I'd appreciate the help! Thank you! sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

1 posted 2006-06-21 10:04 PM

Sky,

You express such a tender heart toward the Lord here. My prayer is that many people would read this and take it to heart for the world would be a much better place to live. I read your poem out loud as I often do most poetry and I found your poem to be a most wonderful prayer of Love and Acknowledgement unto our Lord. He truly is our "Lord of All, and God of All." Thank you, sky, for sharing your poem/prayer with us today.

Thank you and God bless.

-Bob

*I know that this sounds like a cop out, but I think the use of capitalization for pronouns such as Your to replace God or Jesus is very subjective and especially subjective when writing poetry. I went through different phases myself: I have written poetry where I've capitalized all the pronouns that make reference to God and Jesus and I have written poetry when I have not. There was a time when I would spell God with all capital letters—GOD, now, I prefer God. In the Jewish faith, one has such high reverence for the word God that many times they will replace a letter in G-O-D with an asterisk--G*d. So, you see, it can be even dependent on one's faith as to why you capitalize or not. I also many times like to capitalize the first letter of words that make reference to the nature of God such as Love, Peace, Joy, Spirit… I do think, however, if you choose to capitalize or not capitalize that you probably should do it with consistency within each poem as to minimize confusion. I kind of like the way your poem looks with the pronouns capitalized that reference God in your poem because it emphasizes whose attributes you are asking to be found in your life and I would also capitalize the first letter of words that emphasize the nature of God.

Lord of all, God of all,
Cleanse me from my sin.
Purify my spirit
And heal me within.
Grant me Your Forgiveness
For all the wrong I've done
Help me to walk along Your Path
And be more like Your Son.

Lord of all, God of all,
Send to me Your Peace.
Heal my weary spirit
And may it never cease,
So daily I'll remember
That I'm always in Your Care
And all my trials You'll see me through
For You're forever there.

Lord of all, God of all,
Fill me with Your Love
That I may share with others
This Glory from above.
Let Your Love forever be
Shining in my heart
That all may see You live within
And You I may impart.

Just my opinion.

God bless.

-Bob

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

2 posted 2006-06-21 10:04 PM

Amen.

This is a beautiful prayer Sky~

*I think you have just the right amount of capitalization here.*

~Heart Hugs, Nancy~

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

3 posted 2006-06-23 12:57 PM

Sky,

I do like the way that this revision of your poem looks too.

Lord of all, God of all,
Cleanse me from my sin.
Purify my spirit
And heal me within.
Grant me your forgiveness
For all the wrong I've done
Help me to walk along your path
And be more like your son.

Lord of all, God of all,
Send to me your peace.
Heal my weary spirit
And may it never cease,
So daily I'll remember
That I'm always in your care
And all my trials you'll see me through
For you're forever there.

Lord of all, God of all,
Fill me with your love
That I may share with others
This glory from above.
Let your love forever be
Shining in my heart
That all may see you live within
And you I may impart.

The point is… poetry is very subjective and you can use various means of writing it.

However, I do think that it best to stay consistent within the framework of each poem, but, then again, it’s not required.

For example…

I really like the way that you put emphasis on the last two you’s in your poem.

That all may see You live within
And You I may impart.

God bless.

-Bob

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

4 posted 2006-06-23 06:10 PM

Thank you both, Nancy and Bob, for your kind replies and advice! The grammar really had me confused here. It looked funny in print with all the capital Y's, but I also know that it is a good idea to be consisten in a poem, so the reader of the poem is not confused. If you are going to write a poem that only makes sense to you, why write it? Thank you both for taking the time to help me revise my poem as well. Have a great weekend!

sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Tom Zart
Senior Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 682

5 posted 2006-06-23 09:19 PM

Wonderful,Wonderful,Wonderful that is all I can say.

Fuschia
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since 2006-06-19

Posts 35
England

6 posted 2006-06-24 10:03 AM

Lovely.. Absolutely Beautiful Prayer

God Bless

xxFuschiaxx

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

7 posted 2006-06-24 04:00 PM

This is a beautiful prayer and very well done. I prefer to capitalize the pronouns alluding to God. I must have learned to do so in Sunday School when I was a child. Keep up the good work. Love, Joyce

jarrett
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since 2006-05-10

Posts 72
Ut, USA

8 posted 2006-06-25 06:49 PM

This poem brings peace to my heart... thank you for sharing it It was wonderful... I loved it!!

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

9 posted 2006-06-25 08:09 PM

Thank you all very much! I'm glad to hear about the effects my poetry has on people. It always touches me to realize that my words can touch others, and I know that is a gift. Thank you once again to everyone who read and replied!

sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

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