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Good Won't Get You There
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Good Won't Get You There |
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Tndeer1 Member
since 2005-06-24
Posts 87TN. USA |
"Good Won't Get You There" I'm standing there in front of gates like none I've ever found They shine like golden ribbons as they glide across the ground I see the stairs that never end how brilliantly they glow I start to climb and realize there's nothing down below Then suddenly the two appear yes they must be my guide They didn't speak or show their face while they were by my side We reached the top and I was placed in line with everyone The two so quickly disappeared I guess their job was done Such purity was all around so it just had to be The day that would determine where I'd spend eternity The line moved very slowly but since I'd been good and kind I knew where I was going so I really didn't mind I watched so many walk away with wings as white as snow The others were escorted out to where? I didn't know My turn had come to face the Lord but much to my surprise I didn't feel so confident when I looked in his eyes I felt his power all around and nothing was the same He opened up this golden book and asked me for my name He said "Where your name should appear there's just a vacancy" I said "But God I've been so good please look again for me" God closed the book and tiny angels wiped his tears away He said "I hope you'll understand what I'm about to say Do you recall that poor old man who asked you for a dime? You hurried passed and said to him that you did not have time There also was a little child who wanted you to play Again you didn't have the time and pushed the child away In line while at the grocery store she tried to hurry so You grumbled as you passed her by because she moved to slow You see, I came so many times but you turned me away So now I don't know who you are I'm sad for you today If I'm not living in your heart you can't be free from sin So being good is not enough you must be Born Again" The two appeared just like before they stood close by my side This time I saw their faces and became so terrified Through tears I was escorted to my final destiny I had no one to blame at all except for one, just me Then suddenly a ringing sound completely filled my head I opened up my eyes and found that I was still in bed Through sweat and tears I realized how real our dreams could be And then I wondered just how long that God would wait for me That night I gave my heart away I'm Born Again through prayer God proved to me with so much love that "Good Won't Get You There" © By: Freda H. Babinski 7-5-96 Tndeer1 |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is a very well written poem and good story. Since you asked for criticism you might want to change guide to guides in the second verse and face to faces since there are two beings, and in the 8th verse she walks too slow, not to. I hate to see a very good poem spoiled by minor errors. But I really enjoyed this. Love, Joyce |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I like even the startling title. You've managed to wrap a very needed message in a delightful story form. The flow makes the reading so easy. This one's a keeper. Thank you for sharing. May God richly bless you, Rae |
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Musicmaker1969
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
WOW!!!!! Awesome poem. Says it all and says it well. Gave me shivers and I've been a Christian for 23 years now. I pray you share this poem with other people you encounter. Keep writing - you have a great gift given by God. Sheri Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!! |
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Tndeer1 Member
since 2005-06-24
Posts 87TN. USA |
Thank You all for you kind words and even the criticism from Joyce. I always respect the input but she actually wasn't walking at all in that verse. She was in line and in my head, I could see her fumbling at the checkout counter. I write as God tells me and to change anything that is already finished simply doesn't happen. Please let me explain. For instance my mother has been an Author for over 35 yrs. and she has written and rewritten most all of her poems until the beauty and gentle meaning isn't there anymore. You see I was chosen to write and God knew how I really hated poetry of any kind but mine and God's writings are here and I Love it now. So criticism doesn't bother me at all and I will grow as God will have me to grow. So thank you Joyce for your input, honesty and your thoughts. They really are appreciated. God Bless! Tndeer1 |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A wonderful vision and a wonderful lesson to be learned here as well. Your poem reminds me of Matthew 25 and in particular the verse that reads, "The King will reply, 'I tell you the truth, whatever you did for one of the least of these brothers (and/or sisters) of mine, you did for me.'" A very inpirational poem. I let my wife read it and she has sent it off to all her friends. I hope you don't mind. God bless you and thank you for sharing. -Bob |
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Tndeer1 Member
since 2005-06-24
Posts 87TN. USA |
Thank You Mr. Bob, I don't mind it at all that your wife liked my poem enough to pass it on to her friends. We can never know about the seeds we plant, for that is all we can and are suppose to do. The rest is of course, up to God. I thought of that same verse as I wrote this so the message was a reminder for me too. I hope you all can find some time to visit my website. That is also such a wonderful miracle to me because as I have said before, I'm really not that bright so what God has Blessed me with still amazes me to this day. Thank You again, God Bless! Tndeer1 |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 Wonderfully written |
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Gospel Kid 1 Junior Member
since 2006-02-28
Posts 30U.S. IN. |
What a great testimony for the Lord and such truth that we can do nothing to save our selves. Nicly written. |
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