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mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

0 posted 2003-03-19 11:37 AM

When the stars had condescend, the light of freedom
they bloomed for yesteryears
as they passed on the message that was given

their breeze was clear and white
with thoughts
of once knew, of what is true

we climbed the columns of sincerity
that were brought
for the mounting feast that
called the time

as their trumpets could be heard
we looked around
for he has claimed the unwanted
it was told through their souls

that the might of the light
and the truth be granted
for those souls and
all their toll
for which his glory holds.

[This message has been edited by mysticpoe (03-19-2003 03:48 PM).]

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2003-03-19 01:14 PM

This could be lovely if you checked your spelling . Their meaning belonging to them is spelled their not there as in a place. Joyce

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

2 posted 2003-03-19 03:52 PM

Thanks Joyce, spelling and grammer have never been my strong points.

mysticpoe

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2003-03-19 04:08 PM

I didn't mean to be picky but it is so much better now. Love, Joyce

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2003-03-19 04:46 PM

way better! Spelling errors actually stop the reader when reading and breaks the flow. You couldn't have a better person giving you advise than Joyce. This is a very nice poem, and I enjoyed it very much.

Sharon

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

5 posted 2003-03-19 06:46 PM

Thanks Again Joyce and please let me know when things are not right. At times I have a problem understanding my own poetry. Imagine how it is for others when this compounded by grammer errors. Your not being picky, I appreciate your concern.

mysticpoe

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

6 posted 2003-03-19 06:48 PM

Hi mysteria, Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your comments. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

mysticpoe

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2003-03-23 03:38 PM

(sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, He is always here and will see to it we will be delivered to His light through express! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

8 posted 2003-03-25 01:18 PM

Thanks Noah, sorry I didn't respond earlier. Thank You.

mysticpoe

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

9 posted 2003-03-28 04:50 PM

Your poem reminds me of the prophecy in regards to the coming of Jesus Christ that is found in the book of Isaiah which says that the people who walked in darkness have seen a great light.... Good job.

-Bob

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