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aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
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Universal Mind

0 posted 2003-03-12 04:09 PM


A few lines of ink,
May indeed seem to be simple,
Yet to create words that make people think,
To create an invisible brush that transcends
Words to picture, colors of words,
To create a poem that make one pause
And ponder, that...
I've failed to do...

My world is narrow,
My muse are plain...full of cliche,
And I may have pushed too hard
To write something every second day.

I'm an amateur who don't travel.
I'm an amateur who don't know my own craft.
I'm an amateur of the drying well.
I'm an amateur of dark blue ink,
Just as my thoughts are dark... dark clouds.

A few lines of ink,
May indeed seem to be simple,
Yet to create words that make people think,
To create an invisible brush that transcends
Words to picture, colors of words,
To create a poem that make one pause
And ponder, that...
That's what a poet should be

Yet I've failed to do otherwise...
I...I lost faith in God,
I...I lost interest in life.
I...I lost love to myself.
I...I lost my wits that keep me live.

Yonder dreams wither at my feet...

~Every girl has a dream within.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (03-12-2003 04:09 PM).]

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mysticpoe
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since 2003-02-28
Posts 883

1 posted 2003-03-12 04:46 PM


Hi aries,

This poem made me pause and ponder. Your talented.

Wayne

aries_luv_ppl
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Universal Mind
2 posted 2003-03-12 04:57 PM


thanks Wayne

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.

Tristan
Junior Member
since 2003-03-12
Posts 29

3 posted 2003-03-12 09:02 PM


this poem is making me ponder a lot of things at the moment.
great job

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29
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California Desert
4 posted 2003-03-13 04:10 PM


Another interesting post, you give one much to think about.
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5 posted 2003-03-14 07:17 PM




(sigh) Oh Eliza, believe me when I say this, there is no hierarchy in poetry whatsoever, no such thing as talent, for everyone is a poet and what makes us all differnet is how we accept that, where some deny it and never try writing and others gain fame by the determination they have to that fact! (big hugggsssssss) So reclaim that faith and embrace the horizon, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eliza, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Deboborah
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since 2003-03-13
Posts 2

6 posted 2003-03-15 01:47 AM


hello, don't lose your faith in God!!! ;-)

keep writing...

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