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aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2002-11-22 12:48 PM

You say, "I stand, you stand."
But I just can't stand.
The words seem to come too easily.
Can't you acknowledge
That I'm hurt?
It's not self pity;
It's where healings start.
Can't you accept
That I'm hurt?
I need not fancy reality.
"It's okay..."
Please don't tell me that it's okay,
Cause I don't feel I'm alright.
"Hear me out, please,
Before you defend.
It's okay to be feeling down.
I've been there where my world was spinning out.
But still today, I'm standing here.
It may be an old saying
That everyday is a new challenge,
That all mankind struggle under the spring,
Yet that's too true that you aren't alone.
Stand up now; tell yourself you must win.
Every morning is a battle.
Time is tight- it's time to dray
Those tears."

//I think by sharing experience or just being there is better than comfort words. what do you think? I mean I like comfort words too, but I think the others are more effective. Please comment on my grammer and the poem as whole. Thanks.

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (11-22-2002 12:49 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-11-22 02:40 PM

(big huggsssss) Oh Eliza, this is wonderful, sweet friend, yes, we must rise upon each new day and believe the tears will fade with the gentle touch of Him! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eliza, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

2 posted 2002-11-22 04:48 PM

I agree with all of what you have said here about sharing experiences and comforting words or just being there for a friend are all good because they require us to do something.... read, listen, write, etc. What I think may be the worse case scenario would be when we do nothing.... I kind of think writing is better too because it seems a bit more pro-active than just listening to someone else's ideas... Writing challenges us to look deeper inside ourselves... I think. Good self expression here... It sounds to me by what I've read here in your poem that you have a pretty good coach there within yourself who is giving you sound direction and guidance. God bless you.

-Bob

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2002-11-25 04:38 PM

Your poem is full of feeling dear Eliza. Joyce

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