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WorrosLanrete
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0 posted 2002-12-15 05:16 PM



This is more of a narative, not really poetic, more like the story of my Thanksgiving break


He missed her so much even though he had seen her not but two weeks ago
He drove home late that night to see her sooner
Walked outside in the cool winter night
Looked up at the stars and wished she was gazing with him
He called her on the phone, but a male answered and the line was cut dead
Called her again with *67 to get her wondering who called her while blocked
She told him she couldnt watch the stars with him that night
He sat on the hood of his car late that night
With knees tucked in arms at chest and head limply hanging
He sat there looking at the cool night breeze through the silent trees
He sat there looking up at the gentle stars
Wishing that one day he could be as great as the stars
Then maybe she could love him
He sat there for hours in the night
Till the full moon sank back down into the sky
He sat there through the silent night
Till the borrowed peace ran out
He sat there still when skies turned bleak
Till the rain became as tears, tears upon his cheek

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Sunnyone
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1 posted 2002-12-15 07:50 PM


Wow!..After reading Parts 2 and 3, I happened across the first Part!! It all falls into place, and was well worth the read. I really enjoyed the format...and like I said before, the story is familiar to a lot of us!  Thank you for this....~~S~~

Pen how you truly feel...
it is a safety-valve for the soul!
    


Magnus
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2 posted 2002-12-15 09:30 PM


Like this...interesting...and as is the
pen name...  flip it around and whatcha
got?    Nice twist...

passing shadows
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3 posted 2002-12-16 03:09 AM


like this, yes, and the screen name you have also. Looking for more!
WorrosLanrete
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4 posted 2002-12-16 11:44 AM


I may write some more later
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