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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2002-12-15 10:39 AM



My aching head,
gasping for air,
for another glimpse of your skin.

Wandering, following,
patterns of thought,
I know in a second, I'll change my mind.

Remembering helps me to forget,
every inch of doubt,
every cascading tremble.

Wreaks havock upon my soul,
as it slides towards you,
even when i'm pulling it back.

There's no light on;
But a faithful source of moonlight and sun,
Never failing to illuminate you.

If i never saw you again,
I'd live with insanity close to my side,
coping with surviving,
waiting for sunrise and hoping for moon.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

© Copyright 2002 gj - All Rights Reserved
scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
1 posted 2002-12-15 11:12 AM


Beautiful images created by your words, Gemma..

believe in what your heart feels...

arthur
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since 2001-08-14
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england
2 posted 2002-12-15 11:15 AM


thankyou
love the line
remembering helps me to forget
i shall steal it!#
arthur

garysgirl
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3 posted 2002-12-15 11:38 AM


Very good, Gemma. You said it all very well. Thanks for sharing your heart.  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2002-12-15 11:40 AM



If i never saw you again,
I'd live with insanity close to my side,
coping with surviving,
waiting for sunrise and hoping for moon.


Outstanding line Gemma.  This is so heartfelt.  Well done.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2002-12-15 01:32 PM


This was superbly written. So many wonderfully descriptive lines. Your expressive style is captivating and holds the reader's interest.

~ warm hugs
Earth Angel

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
6 posted 2002-12-15 01:34 PM


Wreaks havock upon my soul,
as it slides towards you,
even when i'm pulling it back.


Love these words. thanks for sharing

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
7 posted 2002-12-15 02:11 PM


Thankyou for taking the time to read and comment. all of you make me feel a little more sane with all the support you give. i'm glad you enjoyed it,it's exactly how i feel today, you know when someone is so on your mind that u feel your life is not your own!insanity! lol, i never knew love could make you feel quite this mental! thankyou again for your kind words, your comments mean a lot to me.
lots of love, gemma xxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
8 posted 2002-12-15 06:38 PM


wiating for the moon, so to dream of him again, konw this well.

when i met you.... i knew i would lose my mind..........ever here this song, by ronnie
spector..........its hauntingly real to me

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
9 posted 2002-12-15 06:59 PM


gemjop
Cest la vivre, enjoyed.

vandana
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10 posted 2002-12-15 08:28 PM


enjoy your read
Robert Adamson
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11 posted 2002-12-16 12:42 PM


I like how you positively state a possible romantic calamity. Hum, very nice.

etoodog

passing shadows
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12 posted 2002-12-16 02:50 AM


"Wandering, following,
patterns of thought,
I know in a second, I'll change my mind"

I do this too, but could not write it like this...nicely done!

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