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I Sit There
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I Sit There |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Sitting there, the smell of stale beer, of fallen tears and laughter that died. Sipping the last suds off of a stained glass, covered in my own tears as I cried. I sat there, in want of you, I sat there I cried... I sat there, in need of two, this heart and soul that died... I wish to be beside you, I wish that you were there. I want to love and guide you, my darling... I’ve always cared. You came then through that door, you never knew I was there. You came in, across that floor you walked over to him... I sat there, in want of you, I sat there and died...My heart broke without you, I sat there, I cried... We once were in love you know we did things as a team. We walked through the fallen snow...our life then... A dream... I sit there, I dream of you... I sit there, I cry.... I want to again love you... I sit there, I die... |
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Ada'doLisdo'ti Member
since 2002-12-10
Posts 123California |
Sorrow filled my heart recalls, A love that waltzed away with one new. Left here alone for many falls, Reading this my hearts once again breaks in two. Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence the most. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Wow Barry, that's one sad poem. Amazing the poetry we find in pain. Excellant write, I really liked it. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is a sad one, but it is a wonderful pouring out of heartfelt emotions. Nothing worse than sitting there while the one you love is loving on someone else. Talk about in your face! A sorrowful write indeed and one I can relate to. Hugs~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sad yes, but fortunately...not a present day feeling....I was just kinda singing something along that line and decided to write it... Thanx Duncan, Blues and our new member...Not sure I can spell the pen name.... |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Bary, I enjoyed this bluesy song of yours......... I'm glad it's not your "present day feel".....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Barry, you've expressed longing, deep sadness very, very well in this piece. Only hope it's not a true story. Be well! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn Barry, you write sad so good! |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
You came in, across that floor you walked over to him... This is a scene a thousand and more men could tell, but not describe so concisely and well. Love your work. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so vividly described, Barry... that I was beginning to worry... A great poem bit I'm sure glad its not about you you. ~ loving hugsLyra |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Barry, You write everything so well, so I am not surprised you can come through with this sad tale. Heart touching. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry A feeling that many have had at one time or another, expressed so well, the way that only you can. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang Barry,...heart-wrenching...but good. You sing the blues so well my friend. ~Hugs~ ~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed this |
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