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Pawg
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since 2002-12-13
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0 posted 2002-12-13 10:45 PM


This is the first time I've ever written anything besides a term paper. Please don't be to mean.

I was a chronic smoker
A lowdown, no good loser
Wasted my time doing [edited by moderator] up things
Just gave up, because I was afraid
Started watching my future drift away

Never realized what a great chance I was blowing
Always took things for a joke
All I wanted to do was smoke

Didn’t think that [edited by moderator] would come back to get me
Always expected to be out on top
I forgot the real reason I was here
Started to feel consumed by all the fear

It was a [edited by moderator] day when I found out it could be all over
Didn’t want to grip reality and let fate take over
I hoped that it would all blow over

Wanted all the commotion to go away
Slept the whole time, my guys are on the way
We know it’s time to clean [edited by moderator] up
But we can’t seem to give it up

It has a hold on us as tight as a glove
Felt like we were in love
The drugs consumed all of our days
Cleaned our banks out like it was a giveaway

We’ve made tons of new friends
Who like to kick it whenever they can
Chillin in my room, getting ready boom
The stress is getting closer
Straight thinking about it over and over

It’s all coming to the end now
Have to learn how to control
The urge that keeps us on the low down
The weed that keeps us on the up down

Keep the bowl in the dresser
Don’t give into the pressure
Want to stay straight and keep it loose

Trying to keep down the noise
I’m worried I will be separated from my boys
I keep writing these words to release the anger
Starting to gain control of the chronic hunger

Everyone is gone now
Just up left me
Didn’t call or say goodbye
Just moved onto their own [edited by moderator]

Life is feeling kind of down now
Can’t seem to get rid of this eternal frown

I’m going home soon
Back to the place where love is the key
I’ve got to explain all of my mistakes
Try and get just one more chance

It feels wrong at home
Like I’m the outsider
Used to feel welcomed with open arms
But now just feel like [edited by moderator]

Things are going to change soon
Got to get back on track
Don’t want to leave this new life
But know that it will destroy me

Love is the motivation now
Want to make my mother be proud
Don’t want to let anyone down


-Pawg

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (12-14-2002 09:18 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Dale E Goers Jr. - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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1 posted 2002-12-13 10:53 PM


Pawg,

~WELCOME TO PASSIONS~

I never know if someone is writing about themselves, so I'll say you did touch on the struggles so many have with drugs and the difficulty staying away from them. You wrote a real write.

Hugs and warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Pawg
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since 2002-12-13
Posts 4
Chicago, IL
2 posted 2002-12-14 02:17 AM


TY

-Pawg

passing shadows
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3 posted 2002-12-14 03:06 AM


what a write! Yes, I'm glad to hear a good ending to this lifestyle! thanks for sharing, and welcome to PIP!
Sunshine
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4 posted 2002-12-14 09:22 AM


Pawg, welcome to Passions.  I noted several areas which are now denoted as [edited by moderator] which our language filter caught, and placed in asterisks.  As you have responded to this, I am sure you noted that the asterisks were there.

Please, take time to review the guidelines, and then relax, write, respond, and enjoy your time here in the many halls of Passions!

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2002-12-14 09:30 AM


Pawg
Welcome and well done, enjoyed the read.

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2002-12-14 09:40 AM


Welcome to Passions and Enjoy your stay.  Enjoyed the write.
Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2002-12-14 09:55 AM


Pawg, you have great strength within. It's not easy to walk away from the seduction of drugs and the forces of peer pressure. Please continue to write, as it just might be the one thing you can hang onto that is really YOU, when everything and everyone else seems to be avoiding you. Some just can't stand to be around one who knows how to say NO to the self-destruct button.

Once again, welcome, and thank you for reading and commenting on my poetry.

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8 posted 2002-12-14 11:57 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Dale, this is a very touching and poignant debut, sweet friend, and know your mom and loved ones are all sooooooo proud of you and love is all you ever need! (smiles) God Bless You, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Dale, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dale, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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