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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-12-13 09:02 AM


It feels like one of those days
when hope lies hidden    behind clouds
that stand in the way
and today I am to weak
to try to push them
out of the way,
but yet         I search
for the glimpse of blue
to come breaking through
while I continue

trying to make life
that much sweeter
for she who wears
her smile so brightly
and her heart on her sleeve
when she whispers to me......
"mom, it will be alright..."

but yet this stubborn gray
seems to cast over my day
and I know that the sun
is out there.........somewhere

waiting
for the storm of emotion
to subside
so the light can reside
in my heart once again

but there is no silver lining to see
it is raining for me
inside of a weary soul


continually trying
to wear a smile
and hide the tears
to vanquish the fears

as I cling to the faith
lying obscured
behind those dark clouds

and I know that tomorrow
is yet        another day
another chance
a day to dance

but today
I can only but try.......
to keep trying.




I know that you can 'read' me
but can you  'hear'  "me"?

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (12-13-2002 09:21 AM).]

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inkedgoddess
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1 posted 2002-12-13 09:05 AM


hope is hidden, but you know its there
at least, within grasp

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2002-12-13 09:16 AM


I know this feeling...and know how the days can add one on the other with no feeling that things are changing or that you are any closer to finding that sunshine... you wrote it well..

the ending..yes...sometimes all we can do is keep on trying for one more day or an hour..


hugs to the blues... and hope the sun shines for you today

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2002-12-13 09:20 AM


"and I know that tomorrow
is yet        another day
another chance
a day to dance

but today
I can only but try.......
to keep trying."
--------------------------------------------
Ah your muse rambles well Donna!
Much enjoyed this..especially the above lines.
Full of hope, knowing tomorrow brings a better brighter day!
~Luv and hugs sweetie~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2002-12-13 01:54 PM



Ah, that child that we would turn
the world upside down and inside out for...
that child,
AND the one inside of us,
that needs as much consoling...

You know, don't you,
that she understands?

She really does...

So pick her up
and hug her warm
and tell her
that it will be all right...
soon.

Soon
is magical.
To a child...
it is the next blink
or next day
and they don't really care...
because it
will come,
soon.

Mama said so.

Drifter
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5 posted 2002-12-13 02:33 PM


Thanks for allowing us to peer into you.  I felt this piece more than any other that I've read in my couple of weeks here.  The rhythm simply took me away and into what I perceived as your heart.  Hopefully it helps for you to know that you make others smile even when you're down.  Soon we will smile together.
Nightshade
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just out of reach
6 posted 2002-12-13 02:39 PM


continually trying
to wear a smile
and hide the tears
to vanquish the fears

Donna - sometimes that is all we can do - "try"....keep the faith and try. Well written piece. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
7 posted 2002-12-13 04:38 PM


Donna, I always enjoy it when you ramble. All any of us can do, is keep trying.

Hugs, Marti

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8 posted 2002-12-13 09:21 PM




(smiles) Perserverance is what makes anything possible, and I have total faith you will seek what you are seeking very soon! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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By the sea
9 posted 2002-12-13 09:26 PM


There's so much to see of you in this one, Donna.  All of which are quite appealing, as there's much strength and hope, much belief in life, in another day to dance.  Darn, I wish I could ramble like this!   Hugs, my friend.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2002-12-14 03:20 AM


it sure does feel like one of those days, a lot of days lately...nice ending though

hugs to you

Diane Coway
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11 posted 2002-12-14 11:15 AM


Gentle Spirit,  
This one I can fully relate to, but you said it much more better than I could have.  I am in this space, and I too know the light will come.
Hugs,
Coway

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
12 posted 2002-12-14 12:56 PM


sometimes trying is more important then the result.
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