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"FILM NOIR" (an answer to trixiegrrrl's request for a 1940's style poem...) |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
(Merry Christmas -- fresh out the oven, so to say -- it was a fun challenge... Enjoy & let me know the details, ok?) -MVS ----------------------------------------------------------------- "Film Noir" Copyright 2002 by: MARK V SHELDON The sound of her heels Approaching me Across the wooden floor Made me notice her legs... She was a good looking dame... Walked in clutching her handbag Like a small dog that would bite you If you got too close... Her perfume lingered Like the smoke from my cigarette And I could tell by the way She asked my name That I'd be getting in deep. I offered her a chair But she preferred a drink Scotch On the rocks Like her marriage. As she took the glass I gave her The diamond on her hand Seemed to hide her Graceful fingers... At least I knew Dinner tonight Would be more interesting Than the usual... "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Damn!!!... |
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trixiegrrrl New Member
since 2002-12-12
Posts 6CA, USA |
so amazing. great stuff...glad to be a sort of "inspiration" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Straight out of a Dashiel Hammett book, could easily picture Sam Spade saying all this. Excellent! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Philip Marlowe couldn't have said it better... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes, indeed...great job with this! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Her husband showed up long straight nose pointed to the floor, the other end stuck in a pie that looked like Dennis The Menace's ol' man complete with pocket protector. I was more concerned about his lackey with the punched face and dead eyes. He had a scar from the corner of his yap to his cauliflower ear, but I wasn't bitin'. It was the mark of the squealer, I knew it, he knew I knew it. So when he told me to dangle I cracked wise and asked him who he dueled. I would have called it a mean little smile but the scar dragged it across city limits and before I knew it............ |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A very good story in a poem. Thank you for sharing.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Scotch On the rocks Like her marriage." LOL, this really is an oldie, but a goodie. I saw this scene, in black and white. Damn, you are good with the imagery. |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
The neon sign blinks outside my window as I reach for the bottle in the lower right drawer of my desk.One more drink and a cigarette and maybe I can forget the dame and get some sleep. paladin |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fabulous...write a book...James |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Nancy, now really... trixiegrrrl: thanks for the challenge. Raph: I'm not familiar with Hammett but tried to put myself into a Bogart kind-of character... Balladeer... I'm not familiar with him either, but I guess that's the genre I was going for...? Martie -- thank you. Richard -- I'm most flattered by your continuation. Now, where does the story go from here...? Ethel, thank you for reading -- glad you enjoyed. Kacy, I'm still learning from some of the masters here at PIP... Paladin, it's never that easy... Hey James -- thank you for the enthusiastic suggestion... maybe I'll chip away at it every now and then... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
In the best style of black and white camp--part two???  "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Can't wait for the next installment! Wonderful write. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Mark Dashiell Hammett wrote the Maltese Falcon and is the creator of Sam Spade who was played so memorably by Bogart. raph |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
There was a wad of centuries rolling through the still wet glass rings on my desk top I noticed the ink didn't run which in my business is not always the case |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Her look... had the same stinging burn as the cheap whiskey I keep in my desk. Great read! Ed and...thanks for adding the "Wizard" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
left me on the edge of wondering what happened next... |
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