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Balancing
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Balancing |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Balancing Toes tipped on ledge, I am poised to tumble, limp limbs set to collapse. I’ll throw myself headlong into west winds, points of compass misplaced, picking out wrong stars. You are in another hemisphere, some sky above my atmosphere. Drifting about in this cloud, I may never see you. Somehow, you have found the girth of a constellation to walk upon. When I finally break through my fog, your thoughts will be ferried with the speed of comets. I will come, and know what it is to fall. [This message has been edited by Corinne (12-12-2002 09:44 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Have I ever told you that you are among my favorite poets here at Pip? tis true lady. and as of late, especially, I'm loving what you do. I could relate to this. (surprise...wry typing again) hugs to you. I like. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You are also one of my favorite poets here at PIP. This write was very deep and lingering. I loved the texture of the images, and the music in the background. ThisDiamond |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i really like this until the final stanza. the juxtaposion of wind and luck being leaned on in s2 was really cool. you lose steam though at the end. "zephyrs" does not make sense, Zephyr IS the western wind in greek myth. also the whole metaphor of falling and being carried on wind (i think) got confused in the word play and it took me several reads to sort it out. anyway, it was still good, and I really do think you are one of the best on these boards. -majnu |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Hey, I liked this! I hadn't seen you for a while, and you were missed. Good job. Never be normal! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautifully done, and I am afraid I am no critic, so I thought this was perfect to the point I saved another one of yours for future reading. Thank you. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corinne, I also am no critic, so the only way I know anything about a poem is if I can FEEL something from it. I always feel from your poetry. Thank you for sharing with us.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Beautiful |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) And sometimes falling can feel so touch at first but then you feel so graceful as if you're trying to balance on that same beam you never maintain any extra space! (big hugggsssssss) Yay, I love this, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
balancing... hard thing to do some times... enjoyed this... and you are one of my favorites here as well... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes. I do like it when I open up your poem read, and can only say Yes. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Serenity - what a wonderful gift you've given me, thank you! Thank you kindly, Diamond! Manju - you have a deadly accurate eye! I believe this one is still not done - even after some revisions today...thank you! Thanks, Wind! Thank you Mysteria! Awww, Garysgirl - you're always so sweet, thank you! Thanks Aenimal! Noah - as always, thank you for the kind words! Thank you, Cpat (Ron, is it?) - back at 'ya! Sunshine - all I can say is THANK YOU! Corinne |
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Diane Coway Member
since 2002-08-01
Posts 61USA |
Hey Lady. Loves to read what you write!!! Always Have. Your friend, Red My friend you deserve a rose. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hey Red, is that you? I don't think I've ever known your name! Thanks, lady! Hope all is well with you - and happy holidays! Cor |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! I love this style...free verse..."mood poetry" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Corinne, that was one well-defined balancing act! Gosh, you're good! Someday, you may even believe your readers when they tell you how much your poetry means to them! ~ God bless you dear poetess!--and may your Christmas be full of love and joy Linda |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks Passing Shadows! Linda - you are incredibly kind, thank you! Well, you know how insecure poets can be! Corinne |
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