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vandana
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0 posted 2002-12-11 11:05 AM


Take me home
Today
Let me steal
your heart away
Let me take you
Before It Is too late
Let me make you happy
Let me take your hand
Walk with me
Into this light
Let me be yours
Tonight
Let the time stay long
Open the door
Let me steal your love away
Let me show my feelings
Let me give your reasons
Take me Into your heart
Take me

[This message has been edited by vandana (12-11-2002 11:05 AM).]

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ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2002-12-11 11:07 AM


Heard the restless heartbeat of this one...
Well done. ThisDiamond

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2002-12-11 11:08 AM


tender plea... and if shared should touch the one it is written for..

I enjoyed

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-12-11 11:54 AM




(sigh) Oh Vandana, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I hope your sweetheart hears this request and lets you share this loves joy with him! (big hugggssssss) I wish the best for you, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vandana, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine
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4 posted 2002-12-11 11:59 AM



Ah, now THERE is some
growth showing in this one,
Vandana!  Wonderful!

passing shadows
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5 posted 2002-12-11 12:07 PM


I hope you are allowed to love like this...this is beautiful
Salty
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6 posted 2002-12-11 01:48 PM


I don't believe anyone could turn this down.
I like the demand sound with the luring..very well done.
~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

Robert Adamson
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7 posted 2002-12-11 02:35 PM


I like this style of writing because each word means more. Also, I think about how kind the subject must be to give as she does. Thanking you.

etoodog

scorpio
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8 posted 2002-12-11 03:44 PM


"Let the time stay long.."...there have been occasions when I've wished for that with all my heart...Vandana, this was a stirring read for me...thank you!!

believe in what your heart feels...

Bill Charles
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9 posted 2002-12-11 09:16 PM


vandana - well expressed write. Searching yet to find would be the way...

BC

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