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Sunkissed
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0 posted 2002-12-10 10:02 AM





Your room is empty
Belongings packed neat in corners
Plans laid for the space
Tho I've barely had time to
grieve my loss...

Did you know I cried?

Harder than I would have
for any of the others
Your face in the porcelain
Frame is beside my bed
Where your six year old
eyes smile innocently back

They said you'd never fly
And I guess I'd hoped you
never would...

[This message has been edited by Sunkissed (12-10-2002 10:04 AM).]

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-12-10 10:06 AM


This is so achingly sad. I feel a lump and can't fight back a tear. Heart hugs to you, keep the memory close to your heart.
Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2002-12-10 10:09 AM


This is so poignant and touching.  Peace be with you.  
regards2you
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3 posted 2002-12-10 10:27 AM





This poem is penned beautifully in a most heartbreaking way. If this is a personal experience, may God give you continued strength and perseverance to get this most devastating chapter of life. My heart goes out to all who've known this grief.

Hugs and warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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4 posted 2002-12-10 10:34 AM


Your poem has so much heart-breaking emotion in it....it makes the reader wonder exactly what happened in this situation with the six year old child. It just drew me into the whole scene..
Very good poetry.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Sunkissed
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5 posted 2002-12-10 11:05 AM


Thank you, Everyone, for your kind and warm replies.  I'm sorry for causing any of you grief over these words. When I wrote this, I was thinking of my own selfish feelings and never thought of how it might look to others.

This poem is about my son who has grown up and has moved out. We had a close bond because we are a lot alike and understood one another when others failed to "get it".

When I walked into his room, looking around at the emptiness, it felt as if someone tore my joined twin from me. This poem reflects just how much I truly miss him.


Sunkissed.
  

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