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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-12-10 07:25 AM


Beware the Door

The inquisition-warning shout
Octopus of arms swarm out
Drawn with a gravities pull
Each binding of the blind folds wool.

And the suckers gesticulate
Hanging on each simmering fate
Laying bait in tempting sign
To bite upon mirages line

Standing on a wallows hallow
Waiting for the time to swallow.
Mouthing on infinities bend
Eating on its very end

And here we face the hydras head
To freeze us with a cold of dread
To stop the threads of woven rhyme
To hold the web of sands of time

So do not heed this false of goal
It plans to eat your very soul


© Copyright 2002 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2002-12-10 07:40 AM


you are always laying bait in your titles, Sy..just enough to draw me in and stand at your doorstep. *s
nice
M

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-12-10 07:56 AM


Maureen,
Then the bait worked. Thank you

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-12-10 08:17 AM




(giggles) I would rather use dry writing as bait for this "hydra" then to sacrifice the beauty of rhyme! LOL! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, poetry is the beauty of language, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-10-2002 08:17 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-12-10 09:09 AM


Noah,
Good idea, enjoyed your reply.

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5 posted 2002-12-10 10:06 AM


Seymour darling heart, you are a writer extraordinaire and this is another superb flow of your art.

A candle’s flame flies your soul’s why
Over the mountains up to the sky
There in the clouds the angels sigh
Collecting poems written by Sy
Each poet’s word an angel’s breathes
The soft words falling like autumn’s leaves
To each question they say the same
The answer’s held in this poet’s name
A gift from you of words so wise
Then wrapped in wonder and served in sighs
The flickering of your soul’s clear light
Takes it far into the dark of night
     I would listen to their refrain
     To learn the meaning held in your name

This is exquisite writing and I love it utterly utterly utterly,

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

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6 posted 2002-12-10 10:37 AM


I read a lot into this one Sy, perhaps a different take than your intent. Subtle political/religious conflict imagery emerged.
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7 posted 2002-12-10 10:47 AM


Sy...Oh, I really like this one! The images are surreal with a twist of Sy.  Much enjoyed!
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8 posted 2002-12-10 10:48 AM


I always know that whatever you may choose as your subject, the results will always be excellent words of wisdom. Thank you, Sir.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2002-12-10 11:19 AM


garysgirl,
Thank you love.

Martie
With a twist of Sy, thank you dear.

Midnitesun
Thank you, you are a good reader.

Marsha
You are utterly kind and a wonderful poet.

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10 posted 2002-12-10 11:21 AM


I too see a swipe at political/religious impropriety, but realize that lately you've been penning quite a bit about our ephemeral nature. Don't expect a clarification just want you to know I was here and appreciate.
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11 posted 2002-12-10 11:32 AM



Ah Sy...now you are baring our bones
to core weight.  

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2002-12-10 11:38 AM


RSWells
The cocktail is a mixture. Thank you for the kind words.

Sunshine
You mean Dem bones? LOL

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13 posted 2002-12-10 11:43 AM


The inquisition-warning shout
Octopus of arms swarm out
Drawn with a gravities pull
Each binding of the blind folds wool.

And the suckers gesticulate
Hanging on each simmering fate
Laying bait in tempting sign
To bite upon mirages line

And here we face the hydras head
To freeze us with a cold of dread

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Could this poem be any cooler???
Look at the word play..the personification...the analogies, metaphors and the symbolisms played to poetic perfection

Each binding of the blind folds wool.


love that lines wit, wisdom and clever intend.
Your rhymes rock...and it rolls me

*ww*




Corinne
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14 posted 2002-12-10 11:46 AM


Waiting for the time to swallow.


Sey - one of your most powerful. I hope she/he takes heed. I know I will take this to heart.

Cor

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2002-12-10 02:21 PM


JM,
Thanks for rocking and rolling to three bags full.
I recieved your pictures and they were beautiful and I owe you a letter.
I'll try to get one off tonight barring the unforseen.
Miss you, WWRS :kiss;

Corinne
And you are all heart. Thank you

Aenimal
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16 posted 2002-12-10 10:12 PM


Perhaps it's my own bent that leads me to interpret it this way but wariness of ideals is what I took from this perfectly penned poem. If so, I'm very much in agreement, if not well it was enjoyed immensely regardless of silly misinterpretations on my part  

raph

OOps looks like midnite already had this thought.

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-10-2002 10:13 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2002-12-10 10:16 PM


Aenimal
Pretty close, thank for the read and reply

VAS
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18 posted 2002-12-11 09:53 AM


Impeccable rhyme and love the sound-play throughout!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sandpiper
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19 posted 2002-12-11 05:37 PM


..and most things are not what they seem..whew!!..get me off this rollercoaster---quite a ride, excellent!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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20 posted 2002-12-11 05:42 PM


Excellent write Sie.....

(I saw a sign on a maternity ward door once that read: "push push push".....

Seymour Tabin
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21 posted 2002-12-11 07:09 PM


VAS
loved that you loved it.

Sandpiper
Cute reply.

Toe,
That sounds about right. LOL

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