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A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

0 posted 2002-12-09 08:55 AM

in a crumbled heap
shadows cover his face
the eyes are criss crossing
streaks of red and the former
self sits on a shelf
recalling the way it
use to be

her fingers soothe his
brow they stroke his hair
unfurling she goes to the secret
place, blanketed by his thoughts
he becomes the blood that flows
through her veins

at night he is a distant creature
a consumer of weeds and grains
in the sunlight they
laugh and dance in the memories
of a love that grows as
it fades

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

1 posted 2002-12-09 10:03 AM

Can’t say I understand all the meanings of this poem,
But would be interested in further explanation of it.
Like the images,

Gloom
pgloom@hotmail.com

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-12-09 10:07 AM

like this... the story and the pain told in short form but allowing us to see inside the relationship.

I take fro this one who abuses drink and smoke... and how from the other side it is seen and effects the relationship.

the character telling the story not without their own addiction... to the one they are speaking of...

sad... but well done

Salty
Senior Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

3 posted 2002-12-09 11:03 AM

THis makes me want to cry...such a artful way of expressing your feelings.

Very well done sister!!!!!

Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-12-09 11:08 AM

Yes, I also think it's a beautiful poem...just so sad. It's brimming over with things written "between the lines", with very much emotion.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-12-09 11:12 AM

( I made a boo-boo)

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-09-2002 11:13 AM).]

A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

6 posted 2002-12-09 07:09 PM

Professor Gloom, thank you, I'll try to shed a little light on the situation over at B's

CPat Hair, I'm impressed it seems you can read minds, thank you for your kind words, very much.

Salty, what can I say, thank you so very much.

garysgirl, thank you for reading and taking the time to express your thoughts, I do appreciate it very much.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2002-12-09 10:32 PM

Enjoyed...James

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

8 posted 2002-12-10 04:56 AM

a taste of the sweet and sour--well done!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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