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emptyness
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0 posted 2002-12-08 07:47 PM


i made it to a castle once
travelled through hell to get there
the world outside was ugly

    but once i got there

                     everything changed

the sky turned blue
it rained softly
grass grew

       but such things dont last

banished from the castle
i crwal on the other side
hopeing there is another
to take me in from
this my world

"Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist
"Optimi consiliarii mortui"-learn from the past
it is better to ask for forgivenes than for permission

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Christopher
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1 posted 2002-12-08 08:09 PM


interesting. i read this as a "no place like home" deal... and really like that interpretation. you may have meant it from the literal vp, but it hit me from that one... perhaps i'll find a castle someday myself.

peace,

Christopher

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
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2 posted 2002-12-08 08:35 PM




Sometimes it is better to build your own castles, then no one can evict you.

Like this.

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Greeneyes617
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since 2000-11-22
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3 posted 2002-12-08 10:42 PM


Sounds like life in general. A very "real" peice. Nice write.
garysgirl
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4 posted 2002-12-08 10:52 PM


This is a really good poem. Thanks for sharing it with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

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