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emptyness
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

0 posted 2002-12-08 07:34 PM


I LEFT THE FOREST
LEFT YOU COLD THERE
FINIALLY RIDDING MYSELF OF WHAT
ALMOST KILLED ME

BUT YOU ARE A RETCHED THING
AND THAT HORRIBLE PART OF
YOU STILL HAUNTS ME
FROM THE PAST

I BROKE FROM THE SHADOWS OF
THE FOREST INTO THE OPEN MEADOWS
AND RAN FROM YOU
BUT YOU WILL NEVER LEAVE ME BE
NOT UNTIL I HIDE IN ANOTHER FOREST


"Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist
"Optimi consiliarii mortui"-learn from the past
it is better to ask for forgivenes than for permission

© Copyright 2002 emptyness - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
1 posted 2002-12-08 08:22 PM




Sounds almost like a stalker. Glad the character got away and will find a safe harbor to float free....

I think this would be more effective if you did not write in caps.

The words and 'scene' are powerful, caps. detract from your ability to get your thoughts across in a meaningful manner.

Hugs and warmest regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2002-12-10 04:00 AM


that's kind of spooky...I hope the best for you.
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