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9 Poems of a Suffered Fate
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9 Poems of a Suffered Fate |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Darkness grows in he who waits alone Come the dusk suffer not the day Sleep in heart black without None be left which hold the light Shut the soul none enter hence He can not convince all those with free-will to go down the path of good. Some still suffer after death....... Who then, does God pray to? His angels? Humanity? The creatures of earth? Who then is left for God to pray to when only children beneath him? See the eyes of God I see See the pain behind his eyes See the tears well on his face See him fall upon his knees See the eyes of God I see Grows he then most lonely one Comes she whence unto he Calms the heart of savage beast Filled with love is all he is When she leaves what be left Lonely one beast once more When nothing left When all hapiness gone When you wont find it again When love will fleet and seen no more When hate takes hold and you cant fight it When you pray for death and still none comes When you want it such but are too much of a coward to do it What left can you do? Spirit be gone such lives no more Hope has left with dark to come Morrow comes yet shines no light Come Quick Death I Welcome Night Pray he death that might it come Yet God hates he and lets it not Cast this fate then, not worse below Look above with hate filled eyes Pray He Death Say Let It Come Then mind slips into the deep Shatters then thin frail glass Echoes of the hate resound once 'gain Pulses deep what be left to stop Hands of light seen no more Beware He Then With Hate Filled Core Eyes of hate pierce the day Destroy he then all of light Blood rains down on new stained earth Be none left yet still he fight God then peers on empty place He Looks Up And Eyes Still Hate -JB |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
eternal sorrow, this is quite dark. That's all I'll say since your bio indicates you prefer not to have critiques. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
well written... it brought my eyes, though, to a furrow of helplessness. You described it enough for me to feel it, and it hurts. Just hang on to hope for it does exist. Keep writing. Always, GG - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Ice_Queen Junior Member
since 2002-12-04
Posts 29Delaware, USA |
Chilling, but honest. It speaks to the jaded, and the broken hearted. Love the rhythms, and the basic set up, as well as the separation of self using "he"s and "she"s, instead of I's and You's. Groovy Oovy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Very dark, but also flowing and smooth Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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WorrosLanrete Junior Member
since 2002-11-14
Posts 45 |
Though would rather think those poems forced from my mind were perfect, I know they are not. Near raw from my mind they are. Know a poem when you can not stop from writing it and it is all that you can say. My bio is but a lack of worrying of such. You may creatively critique it if you wish friend. |
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