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Winter's Canvas - Blank Verse
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Winter's Canvas - Blank Verse |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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~*Winter's Canvas*~ The days grow short and Christmas rounds the bend As Old Man Winter dons his robe of white Lone chipmunk scurries gathering his feast While year's last robin finally heads south With nightfall, moon appears in perfect shine Casts eerie glow 'pon nature's work of art Frail branches bent 'neath weight of winter's shawl Play shadows 'cross the rooftops down below The scent of chimneys' exhale fills the air As streetlamps spotlight snowflake pirouettes A distant carol warms a chilling heart While icicles cling bravely to the eves In silence now the world lies fast asleep Awaiting gentle nudge of morning light When Sun with fingers warm shall tease the earth And brush a shimmer 'cross the icy ground 'Tis Mother Nature's masterpiece in play A nightly curtain call for those before ~vlraynes "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-07-2002 03:30 AM).] |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
'tis a lovely canvas indeed! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
With nightfall, moon appears in perfect shine Casts eerie glow 'pon nature's work of art Frail branches bent 'neath weight of winter's shawl Play shadows 'cross the rooftops down below The scent of chimneys' exhale fills the air As streetlamps spotlight snowflake pirouettes A distant carol warms a chilling heart While icicles cling bravely to the eves ================================= what wonderful imagery here Vicky... you penned a postcard of winter and the holiday season's spirit... this is like a poetic Christmas Card. Im still trying to get used to meter without rhyme  ...but these read aloud like butter *L*Frail branches bent 'neath weight of winter's shawl very cool image and personification! Well done poetess girlie...to the head of the class for you.  just one line ... one rhyme ... one metered verse ... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
"Casts eerie glow 'pon nature's work of art. Frail branches bent 'neath weight of winter's shawl." Very nice description of Mother Nature's masterpiece.... Like this a lot. You painted a wonderful winter scene. Hugs and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A beautiful blank verse Vicky! I find this one of the hardest forms to write in with the Iambics.  You have mastered it well! Beautiful. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Absolutely superb and beautiful, too. It has wonderful meter and vivid images all through it. Enjoyed the read. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"When Sun with fingers warm shall tease the earth..." awesome line... very cool write chicky babe!...i like a lot!!! CONGRATS ON 5000!!!! WOOHOO!! lv,g "laughter is the shortest distance between two people" - victor borge [This message has been edited by dgvarner (12-07-2002 12:15 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Whoa, awesome work here, Vick. I'm a real sucker for winter imagery and you haven't let me down here. I love your descriptions; they're very unique and attention-grabbing. Good stuff, Vicky.  Parasite Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 You saw this in Arizona? or in your mind's eyes? Thanks for a delightful scene. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Mother Nature's masterpiece indeed. Lovely words raph |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh Vicky, this is so beautiful. You are such a gifted writer. Hugs, Marti 'A witty saying proves nothing.' |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, this is so magic and beautiful, sweet friend, I just love how you personified winter, it made me think of...Robert Frost! LOL! (kiss on cheek) This is a gorgeous tribute to the beauty and innocence of winter, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-07-2002 01:20 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely beautiful Vicky! Congrats on the 5000th post!! ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 CONGRATULATIONS On 5000 posts, and for your superb work here. It's absolutely amazing what you can write, friend. I love to read your poetry. Thank you for sharing. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Vicky, what a landscape you have portrayed! Beautiful to both the eye and ear! Excellent job, m'lady! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that is poetry! For someone living where people pay a fortune to stay tanned I find it amazing that you can write of the "real winter" with such polish and ease, Bravo! And  on your milestone Vicky. You certainly have graced these halls with wonderful poetry, not to mention great leadership set by example for our teens. I salute you desert flower! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky Just beautiful!!  [This message has been edited by Martie (12-07-2002 08:32 PM).] |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Fantastic writing, Vicky!  No one can draw a blank like you! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetVicky~ You 'know' that I've counted each precious poem by you as gems ... polished to perfection~ Love you sweet friend~ This is imagery at it's finest~ The 'verse' may be 'blank' ... but the canvas is not~ Congrats on that 5000th post ...~ Shucks, that's a mere drop in the bucket to the e-mails you and I have done in mid-of-night !! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This still brings back memories... I can remember staring out the basement window at the snow dancing in the streetlight Thanks for that trip down memory lane, Mum, I needed that No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sandpiper...thank you. Janet Marie...thanks so much, mothy one. Your comments always mean so much to me and you never fail to make me smile. Love and big *HUGS* to you, my friend. regards2you...thanks so much for reading and for the kind comments. I appreciate it much. Gentle Spirit...I actually enjoy writing in iambics. I'm very glad you enjoyed reading it. Thank you. Vandana...thank you. Virginia...thanks so much for the kind reply. I appreciate you taking the time to read, and I'm very happy you enjoyed it. Gale...LOL...I should have known that would be your favorite line, what with the 'teasing' and all. Thanks for reading and thanks for the congrats. Love ya and miss ya much. Brian...so glad you enjoyed this one. The winter imagery was something different for me, but I did enjoy writing it. Thanks for the kind words. Midnitesun...though I have spent a little time in the snow and even lived at the Grand Canyon for a year, where I learned what it was like to be snowed in, most of this came from my "mind's eye", as you put it. I believe I was also helped along by the memory of some pictures and movies that I've seen though. Thanks for the kind reply...glad you enjoyed. Aenimal...thank you much. Marti...thank you SO MUCH for 'gifted writer'. You just made my day. Hugs back at'cha. Noah...thank you, my friend. Your replies always bring a smile to my face. Nancy...thanks so much for the kind words and for the congratulations. I appreciate it much. Ethel...thank you so much for the sweet reply. I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Karilea...I'm so glad you enjoyed this bit of winter. Thanks for always being there with a kind word. Sharon...LOL @ the 'staying tanned' line. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this 'real winter' imagery. That someone who actually lives through this on a regular basis would enjoy and appreciate this, makes it all worthwhile and makes my day. I also appreciate your constand encouragement concerning my work with the Teen forum. You know that I absolutely LOVE it in there. Thank you so much for the kind words, and for being you. *HUGS* Martie...thank you, my friend! Balladeer...LOL @ you and your wit. You have to know that you ALWAYS make me smile. Thanks so much for being you and for being my friend. Great big *HUGS* to you. Marge...and YOU know that no thread of mine is complete without a reply from you. Thank you so much for sticking by me and ALWAYS being my friend. Been missing you lots. Great big *HUGS* and much love to you. Rhonda...that this brought back memories for you, makes me smile BIG. I'm so happy that you enjoyed it. Thanks for being so good to your Mum. Love and *HUGS* Thanks again, everyone! Big *HUGS* and much love to all,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-08-2002 04:28 PM).] |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
rofl@Michael! Impressive, Virgil. I came in somewhat dubious - because of my natural dislike of the form, not your talent - but was actually held by this one. Some darn good lines, but more appreciation for a realistic flow. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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