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Grandfather Tick
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Grandfather Tick |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The weight of worry, the yearn of the whispered unknown. The living of moments in want of speech. The toils of drudge and dredge of soil. The stillness of the telltale ring as the wires are cold....silent. Monotonous tick of the grandfather as time walks across the room in slivers of darkened light...Hustle waning as bustle dies upon the concrete of a walk now empty... When... All is quiet, ‘cept perhaps the tick and the brush of tail as the dog laughs and swats a landed fly before the flea jumps into the pool of waiting hair... Waiting...wanting to speak the word and hear the voice of authority.....as a heart rushes to the beat and words sit on lips.....impatient....ready for the swing of life’s rope over the pond of decisions... Drowning in the overwhelm of fear and and the wait of a ring.... As the clock ticks and ticks... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Some times we can get lost in the well of the libido. You walk very close here. Be well. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...sometimes waiting for something causes time to slow or even stop...you made this feel so real.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Sy....did this for a friend who is waiting...and waiting to hear a word regarding a career move... Martie...yeah...for a sec or two...I thought my heart might stop beating.....but it didn't!!! Thanx dear one... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Barry... yes, at points time does seem to stand still. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, the whole poem is good, but this part was really cute to me.... "When... All is quiet, 'cept perhaps the tick and The brush of tail as the dog laughs and swats a landed fly before the flea jumps into the pool of waiting hair..." I love it that you think dogs laugh, too. My little Scooter laughs and cries. In fact, I'm expecting any tme for him to start talking back to me when I have those long talks with him. Now, that would be something, wouldn't it??  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy, yes, sometimes it does seem to stand still...HUGIES.. NO, not diapers! Ethel....yeah....I swear my dogs laugh at me all the time...especially when I have to clean up after them....sitting there grinning and.... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I think this poem could apply to many scenarios...from call from hospital to call from a wayward child found, results of a biopsy, med. tests, even waiting for news of someone's birth, etc. etc. you captured the apprehension and intensity of the wait well, and I enjoyed all added detail which made it seem I was there waiting too. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Masterful writing! I felt every tick of that clock as the poem built in suspense. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
The art of "waiting" is not one of my stronger points--you've described the "agony" perfectly!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Barry, I too know this feeling ever so well, sweet friend, I think of my Joanna everyday and love and miss her so much and just thinking of her smile brings me to tears and it can be so hard sometimes to get through the days! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is heartfelt, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Magnus, your muse is being most kind. More, please... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Magnus is synonymous with poet! ~ HUGS EA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Your eyes are so perceptive and your mind listens to their visions so well. Marvelous taste of time's relentless movement. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Speaking as an authority on this subject...It is a good one to share... Funny how time will succumb to the laughter and light of a good friend. Best Regards, ThisDiamond |
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