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RSWells
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0 posted 2002-12-04 05:35 PM



That 42 degree day found the Merrimack
full and towering Red Maple's broad
leaves mostly fallen and burnt in death.
Yet some splay in rust with yellow veins.

A pair of New Hampshire state employees
walked off the late lunch of the near
retired, past Franklin Pierce's grave
as cool winds ushered on November's debris.

One reach down to snag a leaf from the
low growing Checkerberry, pinching it
to draw it's wintergreen scent.

A slightly warmer Scranton found young
mothers pass the last school hours in
Nay Aug Park. Littered with dark brown
acorns it's Northern Red Oak skirted

with deep furrowed bark, branches still
clinging to most it's bright red, sharp
point leaves. Large Fothergilla shrubs
display blue-green and russet leaves.

Two boys play hooky in the tallest oak
after tiring of skipping rocks across
the Lackawanna River.

A third generation dairy farmer sat quiet
on an Appalachian ridge over Henry Lake.
He lean against the marbled trunk of a
Paperbark Maple and watched the V shaped

valley for a deer. In the lower 47 degree
vale on loamy soil grew Wintersweet, sparsely
displaying sulpher yellow flowers. He drew
on his Lucky Strike not caring if he saw prey.

He was content with the fragrance and
peace of his beloved Tennessee.

In Dallas it was 58 degrees.
A limousine sped to a hospital
with a dead man and his pretty wife.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

© Copyright 2002 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-12-04 05:57 PM




Oh my goodness. The last two lines were a total surprise, worth a couple re-reads. Very much enjoyed.


Warm regards, Pat

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2 posted 2002-12-04 06:01 PM


you do this well RS... well enough to make me envious at times ( smiling)

We that are old enough do remember where we were and what we were doing. I was in a class room and remember the teacher crying after she told us what had happened and that we were to go to home then...

beautiful job with the imagery here and of tying the scenes together.

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3 posted 2002-12-04 06:32 PM


I can not recall a single thing in my life that has stayed with me like this event in history.  It's funny you wrote this as I just watched a special on Larry King as he interviewed the wife of the Governor who rode in the car that day.  She too was thinking just ordinary things never dreaming she was in the middle of what would change history and become an event people would grieve for the rest of thier lives.  The tears flowed in the classroom I was in that day, and I have a tear in my eye right now, and probably will every time I am reminded of this event.  I enjoyed this reminder to honor a great man.  Extremely well done, and the imagery in this was wonderfully vivid.  I recall loosing my breath then as I did now reading this.
                

                
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4 posted 2002-12-04 06:37 PM


Richard

What a great job you did with this...the contrasts of nature and event, the imagery, the power of the last lines. Very well done!

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5 posted 2002-12-04 06:47 PM


Makes one sigh...in memory of the last.

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6 posted 2002-12-04 07:00 PM


RSWells
Can't add much to the accolades above, but you have my respect as a writer.

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7 posted 2002-12-04 07:24 PM


Very descriptive poem! I enjoyed it alot. But of course you don't need little 'ol me to tell you it's good.
Laugh often, love much, live well.

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8 posted 2002-12-04 07:33 PM


The last two lines jarred me out of my daydream of late autumn as quickly as the bullet that killed Kennedy.
How well I remember...the day, the moment..the feeling of shocked disbelief.
Well done poet sir.
~Hugs~

~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~

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9 posted 2002-12-04 09:42 PM


I, myself was on my knees in parochial school, at church. The nuns passed, rushed with importance, the whispered word that "our president has been shot". I recall vividly the cover up shooting live that Sunday morning of Oswald the scapegoat and will not rest easy till the truth is told. Certainly this was a mere mortal with all the inheirent faults but WHO KILLED JOHN KENNEDY?
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10 posted 2002-12-04 10:59 PM



Mine is reminiscent of Cpat and yours, Richard.  I've read too much to think that so many passings were naught but accidental...there is too much rustling among the leaves...

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11 posted 2002-12-05 03:15 AM


Richard, it was really excellent the way you described this.
I, also, was completely involved with the way you were painting
the picture of the leaves, boy sitting in tree, etc., and
then there was the last. I knew right away that you were
speaking of President Kennedy.
Thanks for sharing.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

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12 posted 2002-12-05 05:29 AM


I moved through this in slow motion, enjoying the scenery..until the whirlwind ending--love the structure, quite powerful--(would have loved to know the reaction of the class to this one!).  And I doubt we'll ever know, at least not in our lifetimes.

[This message has been edited by Sandpiper (12-05-2002 06:06 AM).]

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