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GOlDsparklESS
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0 posted 2002-12-02 03:52 PM


All the depraved, terrifying angels could not save me, they merely lament, mourning this


Perpetual gasping

A soul in scorn
suffocating in seas;
LOVE, for surely
there is no other thing more worthy of


Perpetual grasping

There is no other turmoil that embraces
Madness, anger, and sadness; ceaselessly this
Storm pounds the shore, just to drown, to hear no more-
The slow churn of tension burning within-
relenting to unravel, then
Ruined
and dashed, threads are slashed, counting amounting to nothing
the days I wasted to entertain you

under pale hued skies , indifferent eyes
surmise the dark encroachment of an
inescapable catastrophe  


© Copyright 2002 Manisha Narang - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2002-12-02 04:24 PM


GOlDsparklESS
Well not everything works out. LOL enjoyed

EagleScorpion
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2 posted 2002-12-02 09:02 PM


my oh my...

this sounds horrible! I feel bad for whoever this is about!

GOlDsparklESS
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3 posted 2002-12-02 09:10 PM


(this type of language and response is not acceptable in Open)

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (12-02-2002 10:00 PM).]

EagleScorpion
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4 posted 2002-12-02 09:12 PM




You need to chill out

regards2you
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5 posted 2002-12-02 09:28 PM




~Intense~ turmoil!!! Wow, you captured it completely.  If you are speaking from a personal experience, my heart goes out to you....

Keep writing for I'm sure you'll touch others, who've known the same frustration and sense of loss.....

Sometimes things very powerful cause odd reactions from me, or others, either I crack a joke, or like this morning told someone, in part, his poem made me feel like throwing up.....it honestly did, it was that good!

Please don't feel upset by replies, this is VERY INTENSE....

God Bless, Warm regards, Pat

  

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

GOlDsparklESS
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6 posted 2002-12-06 05:09 PM


oops-

Thank you.

[This message has been edited by GOlDsparklESS (12-07-2002 01:03 PM).]

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