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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2002-12-01 09:59 PM


Sweetie

At some point in time he's going to want
his life back because she's much too needy.
That's what I found myself thinking when
my friend was telling me stories about
her and her boyfriend.
She said he had to call her every morning
and sometimes they would talk for hours.
He had to kiss her about one hundred times a day.
Seems to me they would need to take a shower.
She said he bought her tons of flowers
and I never did that.
And he always called her Sweetie.
No way I could possibly top that.
When she goes to his house
he treats her like a queen.
He feeds her and pampers her
she doesn't have to do a thing.
He sure knows how to treat a woman
Sweetie stated as a matter of fact.
I told her in about six months
he was probably going to want
his life back.

JamesLee
December01
2002

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2002-12-01 10:11 PM


Now, James, women do like to be pampered. And, maybe he
enjoys pampering her.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

amusemi
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2 posted 2002-12-01 10:16 PM


That would drive me absolutely nuts.  Sappy, sloppy love is too suffocating!

My vote goes to private tenderness.


Christopher
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3 posted 2002-12-01 10:16 PM


ROFL! I understand there's some intended ache here, but the whole idea and telling cracked me up... so many times we and others we know have sunk into the newness of a relationship... i guess it's the ones who don't come back up for air that are turned into legend.

cool poem, i liked what it said and how you said it - conversational, yet poignant at the same time.

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2002-12-01 10:16 PM


Smiling...because you captured an important point to ponder...Very well done. ThisDiamond
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2002-12-02 06:45 PM


Thank you garysgirl, amusemi, Christoper and This Diamond...
Yes in a way it seems so absurd to an observer and yet it is so real and so beautiful to the participants...
However the real test usually comes in about six months...when emotions move back into the normal positions...James

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