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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-11-30 07:16 AM



What is this you've done to me?

Once I was your everything.

What is this I let you do?

Nothing left.

No love for you.


And we don't care enough to cry.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2002-11-30 07:32 AM


very sad...I liked the ending..I almost wanted to rewrite it as
we don't even care enough to try...

M

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-11-30 07:38 AM


Yanno what lady? I saw one reply and KNEW it was you...



it's like veterans of war....

glad you got your papers to finally go home.

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2002-11-30 07:57 AM


  well I was just about to go to the mall and see what I can see and possibly treat myself to something, since I HAVE been such a good girl this year...

well at least I haven't been standing on a taverns parking lot getting myself barred from any more bars this year...



M

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-11-30 08:00 AM


YOU TOO?

dang...seems like ole times...

laughing

gimme five..and hey, buy oils...egyptian musk...egyptian musk...egyptian musk...

Happy Holidays Mo!

RSWells
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5 posted 2002-11-30 08:47 AM


Harsh....final....exhausting. Understood.
garysgirl
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6 posted 2002-11-30 09:34 AM


Yes, Karen, this does sound very final. It has to be
that way sometimes, doesn't it?
~Hugs~

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Sandpiper
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7 posted 2002-11-30 09:37 AM


Something to be said for knowing when the end is the end--and you said it quite well.
Earth Angel
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8 posted 2002-11-30 09:41 AM


..."And we don't even care enough to cry"--says it all.

EA

Enchantress
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9 posted 2002-11-30 09:47 AM


I know this feeling Karen...I remember it well.
Beyond the point of even crying about it.
~Hugs~

~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~

Mistletoe Angel
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10 posted 2002-11-30 08:30 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Karen, I too understand this feeling so well, sweet friend, I pray this feeling is not current as I send angel hugs of hope and comfort your way! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Ethan Halo
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on the roof again
11 posted 2002-12-01 02:19 AM


sounds like some people i know...
sounds like you need a drink...or WE do...

enjoyed the title too, serenity.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

passing shadows
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12 posted 2002-12-01 03:55 AM


sad...but so true
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