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ambermize
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0 posted 2002-11-30 03:01 AM



My place is you...

    Underminding my dreams,
    Of everything you said,
    That I could never be,
        ......Yet still I stay.

My life is you...
  
    Even after the smile fades,
    Locked away deep inside,
    Until you hand me better days,
        .......I will cry no more.

My passion is you...
  
    As bewildered as I am,
    I am not allowed to feel,
    This moment where I stand,
        ........Lusting over memories.

My courage is me...
  
    To make this what it is,
    Despite what it will never be,
    Ill lose you in my kiss,
         .........Forgiving..just the ache.

© Copyright 2002 amber mize - All Rights Reserved
neveah5
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1 posted 2002-11-30 03:44 AM



Great show of emotion...so sad. those situations are among some of the worst.

Kethry
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2 posted 2002-11-30 04:23 AM


amberize,
deep and sad words with a hint of courage that touches the heart.
Write on!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



RSWells
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3 posted 2002-11-30 09:00 AM


A painful write by a strong hand.
Earth Angel
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4 posted 2002-11-30 09:22 AM


Very effective writing---how you structured the poem and how you were able to pull the reader into your pain.

There is a sense of your knowing, strength and understanding conveyed with your words and of your being able to step back and take an overview of what is going on in your relationship.

Hopefully, all will improve for you and that has just been a temporary dip in the love meter.

~ sending warm hugs

Earth Angel

Sandpiper
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5 posted 2002-11-30 09:31 AM


Bittersweet woven beautifully--the end says it all.
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6 posted 2002-11-30 08:28 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Amber, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I too only hope this is a temporary dip and all will be forgiven as the tears are kissed away sympathetically! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Amber, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sunshine
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7 posted 2002-11-30 08:28 PM


Amber...you've been away so long...good to see you!
ambermize
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8 posted 2002-12-06 01:41 AM


Yes I know, extremely to long, but dont worry, I will be making up for lost time I am sure. Hopefully my heart will start to see better days....

Nice to be back in the comfort of friends.

Sometimes the softest moments, are the hardest on your heart.

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