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ptwils165
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0 posted 11-29-2002 12:15 PM       View Profile for ptwils165   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ptwils165

A face on a train reminds me of her,
standing at shore, flicking strands of wet hair.
Staring through sunlight as if life were a window
to all shed amazed at, when the world was laid bare.

The moon rising gently, over ruins or trees
whistles me back to those soft summer days;
catching the wind shifting sands down the ocean,
arrested by innocence in warm Augusts rays.

A face in the mirror tells me shes gone,
that loneliness grows now this image is torn.
Yet sat in the silence with a photo in hand,
Im right here beside her, through this darkening dawn.

© Copyright 2002 ptwils165 - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-29-2002 12:21 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Welcome to Passions, where no one is ever really alone...  Please!  Check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

gemjop
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2 posted 11-29-2002 12:23 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Welcome!
very much enjoyed your first post. loved the lines :
"whistles me back to those soft summer days;"
and...
"Im right here beside her, through this darkening dawn."
once again, welcome, hope you enjoy every moment youre here!
lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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Gaia


3 posted 11-29-2002 12:28 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

A sad write, but well written.
WELCOME!! Hope you enjoy these blue pages.
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light


4 posted 11-29-2002 12:30 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel


Welcome! I love this, your first post! It's a little beauty! Some fantastic lines and you nearly moved me to tears with some of them. Very touching.

I look forward to reading more of your poetry!

Earth Angel
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5 posted 11-29-2002 12:54 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(big hugggsssssss) This is such a sad but heartfelt debut, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I wish for loves train siren to again come to you and fill your deserving heart with true happiness, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...


6 posted 11-29-2002 01:33 PM       View Profile for MARK V SHELDON   Email MARK V SHELDON   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MARK V SHELDON's Home Page   View IP for MARK V SHELDON

Salutations!  You've managed to achieve one of the highest honors in my book:  "The Goosebump Factor" with this poem.  There is great comfort in relating...  Enjoy your stay.

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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7 posted 11-29-2002 01:37 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Very much enjoyed your first post!
I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~

ptwils165
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8 posted 11-29-2002 02:48 PM       View Profile for ptwils165   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ptwils165

Wow! What can I say guys?!!! -except thank you all so very much for the most incredible welcome I think I've ever known. I'm so glad that some of you enjoyed the poem - you'll have gathered I'm brand new here, as I am to writing poetry in general so thanks for the encouragement. Hope some of the comments weren't just to cheer me up either!

thanks again, take care,
Pete.
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Hurricane Alley


9 posted 11-29-2002 04:26 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to the family! I enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more from you. Take some time and find all the nooks and crannies of our home. We've got a workshop, some discussion forums and plenty of ways and forms to read poetry!
Seymour Tabin
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ptwils165
Well done, enjoyed the read.
ThisDiamond
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11 posted 11-29-2002 08:49 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Welcome...enjoyed your first post...look forward to sharing more.
ThisDiamond
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just out of reach


12 posted 11-29-2002 09:45 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Pete - Welcome to Passions!! I really enjoyed your poem. Have fun here. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Miah
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13 posted 11-29-2002 09:50 PM       View Profile for Miah   Email Miah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Miah

Very sad. Great write! Welcome to passions!

regards2you
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Noticed  a poem in open 26 and was so taken with it, decided to look at your first poems, posted.

This is wonderful as the other.

Deeply touching, you remind me of another poet I've read....

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

gemjop
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15 posted 06-06-2004 02:28 PM       View Profile for gemjop   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gemjop

Yes, still loving this.

 
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