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Making Plans Under The Velvet Skies.( all my 11 verses)
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Making Plans Under The Velvet Skies.( all my 11 verses) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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The stars are shining brightly in the velvet skies whispering softly Walking hand in hand by the soft light of the moon on the beach at night With feet in the sand we lie down on the blanket while watching the stars While we watch the stars we dream and talk of our lives hearing the soft waves Planning our future lying under sparkling stars in black velvet skies Lying side by side on the white sand of the beach we spoke of our dreams We were there all night with sun rising o'er water the daybreak came forth Sun shining brightly with reflections of color on clear blue waters The suns rays shine forth sending down feelings of warmth on to the white sands Sea shells on the sand with the sound clearly inside whispering softly Softly in our ears we hear sweet sounds of our dreams and plans we have made (These are eleven of the Japanese verses that I wrote all combined. I thought it was a little different. Maybe one day I will know exactly all the technical differences between a "haiku" and a "senryu". I love those little verses, don't you all? They are really fun to try to write.) [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-29-2002 10:27 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
garysgirl Interesting and well done, enjoyed the read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Very clever, you are. Enjoyed much. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Seymour, thank you so much for reading and your kind reply. I really do appreciate it.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, blow me over with a whisper! What a wonderful compilation! Very much enjoyed! ~ as grains of sand on the beach, so be the days of your's and Gary's love... Linda |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Pat. I always enjoy reading your replies. I hope that you had a wonderful Thanksgiving day and don't feel as stuffed as I do today. Thank you for reading amd replying. I really appreciate you, friend.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
softly written and a great composite of gentle love and passion for it (gentle love that is) Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Linda, thank you very much. I love to read all your little haiku's and senryu's. You are a master at writing them, and a great teacher. Thank you, Earthy Angel.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Virginia, thank you so much for reading and for your reply. I really appreciate your comments and instruction. Did you ever find that site you mentioned earlier about the technicalities of writing haiku's and senryu's? I really enjoy these and would like to know more about how to write them. Thank you, sweet lady. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-29-2002 11:00 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I always thought they were different sounding sneezes until I came here?....(Of course it's evident when you read my poetry too).... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
its so lovely to see them all put together, and so breathtaking. they painted such a beautiful picture in my mind, it made me want to act it out. especially as you were describing one of my favourite places, mine happens to be, clifftops at night, seeing the stars and listening to the sea, so thanks. lots of love gemma xxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. [This message has been edited by gemjop (11-29-2002 06:43 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well that's just prety neat! I enjoyed this Ethel. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles and does happy dance) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, they look soooooooooo beautiful all together, you are just amazing, I could feel the ocean cradling me here, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) There is no technical difference at all in the form between a haiku and senryu, simply a haiku is a 17-syllable verse, in 5-7-5, which talks of nature, whereas a senryu is the exact same form only it doesn't talk about nature! (big hugggsssssss) Yay, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
How lovely! You are SO creative! Very very beautiful Ethel. ~Hugs~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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quik Member
since 2002-11-27
Posts 91Dinwiddie,Virginia |
I love it very nice and thanx for the comments. Its nice to hear from people like you to interact with poetry. once again thanx and very good!!!!!! I love it. Oh, you can read the others i posted. see ya |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Toe... They really do kinda sound like a sneeze, don't they? HaHa!! Thanks for replying to my poem (verses)!! "Love makes the world go around" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
11 little pieces of delicate and beautiful poetry... Nicely done Ethel.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
gempop,thanks for your reply. Oh, there aren't any clifftops around this area, but I imagine the water and skies are beautiful from on them. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Ethel, that was beautifull. the whole thing. I like them even better when they are together. This is going into my library. Never be normal! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Looks to me like you did this very well. This is beautiful. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Super Fabulous .... Great, great job and I so loved each one seperately and loved reading them all together. Hugs, Marti 'Don't give up. Moses was once a basket case...' |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
VERY nicely done, Ethel! These flow together beautifully and the rythym they create is very pleasing to the eye. Well done!  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ethel - this is really wonderful. Enjoyed this creative piece of work. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Dixie, Thank you so much. I really do appreciate that. Noah, Thank you for the explanation. Noah, I really do appreciate all your help and kindness and you sweet replies. Nancy Lee, Thank you for your reply.You are the creative one, lady. I love your poetry. "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Quik, Thank you for your reply, too. I'll go read your other posts. Barry, Thank you so much for reading and for replying to my verses. You are such a fine poet. Liz, Thanks, little Liz. I'm glad you like them and that makes me feel good for you to put this in your library. Thank you. "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, Thank you so much. BTW, I went to your website the other night. I like the way you did your poetry. It's really pretty. Marti, Thank you so much. I love all the ones I've read of yours. You are really good at these, sweet lady. Michael, Thank you so very much, sweet Balladeer I really do appreciate your reading and for your comments. Chris, Thank you for reading and for your reply. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-29-2002 11:11 PM).] |
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