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Jason
Member

since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

0 posted 2002-11-28 03:58 AM

As I sat there and watched
I saw the Show slowly unfold
then I listened as well
to hear the words left untold
and the lies within the lives
of those poor wretched souls
who've been imprisoned since youth
within the life they'd been sold
and they can't escape now
because they think they're too old

So they sit back and watch
to see the Show slowly unfold
then they listen as well
to hear the words left untold
and the lies within the lives
of the poor youthful souls
who want something for nothing
and are, themselves, the ones sold
only to learn their mistake
as they too slowly grow old

Now you sit here and watch
you'll see the Show slowly unfold
if you'll listen, as well
you'll hear the words left untol
and the lies within the lives
of the misguided souls
who've come here to bargain
for more power and gold
though it is never enough
to replace what they've sold
because, in spite of it all
they can't stop growing old.

Jason Daniels
2002

This is the latest version of an old poem.
It is a re-write of one of my originals.
It doesn't fit the season, but it fits my life now.

P.S. Happy Thanksgiving to All.

Practiced in the Art of Perception...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-11-28 07:20 AM

the repetition makes it hit home...

old or not, it's written well.

*s
M
you have a nice day, also.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2002-11-28 10:47 AM

youve taken this slice of life and written of
it well......

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2002-11-28 10:52 AM

Jason
Interesting write, enjoyed.

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

4 posted 2002-11-28 11:05 AM

Very intreging I enjoyed reading it very much

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2002-11-28 11:12 AM

I enjoyed the flow of this; it is well written and a thinking piece.

Have a good day...

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2002-11-28 11:46 AM

Hope the season gets to you before the day is out, feeling trapped and too old to change circumstances is too sad, anytime, but especially today.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2002-12-02 08:42 AM

Well... I happen to know how old you are... and that there's still time to turn those lies to truths... and through poetry like this you've taken some veritable steps, m'friend...

[This message has been edited by Nan (12-02-2002 08:44 AM).]

Jason
Member

since 2002-07-31

Posts 72
Macon, GA

8 posted 2002-12-02 11:54 AM

Thank You All,

What a wonderful feeling I got when I came here and saw all these encouraging words from all you beautiful people.
I wish I could spend more time here among you fine folk.

Jason Daniels

P.S.
Nan, this isn't about me, it's an observation of the world around me.
Drop me a line some time, I'll tell you all about it.

J.D.

Practiced in the Art of Perception...

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