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brianm
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since 2002-11-22
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Colorado

0 posted 2002-11-27 04:30 PM



the love must die
i must deliver it to the lord

what was innocent was embellished

the abundance of my love is damning to her walk
it is damning to my own

she belongs to him and i have selfishly claimed her as my own
i must return what i have stolen

if i give it back
there is still a chance

a chance
that it might be given to me in the end

forgive me
she is and will forever be yours

humble me

in my heart, i have slain her
but it is my heart that is failing

the void in my chest is to expansive for me to bear
resurrect me Lord, as only you can

replace the absence with your presence
Father, i love you
hold me to your breast,

and dry the tears that have spilled on my soul

© Copyright 2002 brian falls - All Rights Reserved
Miah
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since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2002-11-27 04:31 PM


Very deep read.  Good write.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2002-11-27 04:46 PM



Brian, I saw the work that you did on this when you first put it in CA.  You hung tough and kept to your original thoughts, while accepting the feedback you were receiving in CA.  

When I first saw it I flagged it as one to watch.  I am glad I did.  Thank you for coming to Passions and for sharing your poetry with us.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (11-27-2002 04:47 PM).]

brianm
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since 2002-11-22
Posts 16
Colorado
3 posted 2002-11-27 04:52 PM


Thank you both.  I have written so much lately, but 'my sacrifice' touched my heart so much as I wrote it.  It is a very speacial piece to me.  I am happy that I found somewhere to share it.
Radrook
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since 2002-08-09
Posts 648

4 posted 2002-11-28 07:58 PM


Love is to be willing to let go.
I liked this poem!
Thanks for sharing!
God Bless!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (11-28-2002 08:03 PM).]

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-11-28 08:03 PM


Much enjoyed this piece of work.
~Hugs~

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Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2002-11-28 08:57 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Brian, this reminded me of the Creed song "My Sacrifice", I hope everything is alright, just ask Him and He will come and kiss the tears away and give you the strength to move on and rebuild! (sigh) In send angel hugs of strength your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Brian, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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