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The Ashes Fall Up
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The Ashes Fall Up |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The ashes fall up the sky is humming with flying vessles they coat the creases where the sycamore waved a sky now nestles with soot of tinder the air is full of your remains they say at night a fire lays down it has lain down for days ashes surround a small green thing that starts then two and I think oh how I miss you your sweet swollen brown eyes filled now with ash and blown around this wind takes it all and makes a fire again the sky is the color of a tomb and from the room the moan is calling to the moon where oh where is the pretty place where tears could weep clean and fall without making prints on face I have left you so many times pushing you from my womb the first oh how you voiced my minutes then with lines that were so simply made of love began when will I be through with missing you The ashes fall up I breathe them in and wipe them from my eyes before I realize they could be you ---- I felt this needed an explanation. The area where I live was devastated by a fire last month. This week the Santa Ana winds have been blowing up to 60 MPH and have filled the air with the ashes from the fire. My daughter's ashes also rest on that same mountain...placed there many years ago. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie... I wish I could explain my goosebumps. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie~ Your caring words & heart explains it all to well. I watch the news from your lovely state each day from afar and feel for all the people that are faced with so many terrible ordeals. May your mountains and daughters ashes remain safe...Paul |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I felt I knew where you were going with this, Martie, but after reading your explanation and then the last stanza once again, a chill went through me. If that is what good poetry is supposed to do then this is exceptional.... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Dearest Marti, I suddenly realized how big Calif. is...how I wish I could come right down there to give you big hugs and share with you this heartache you are experiencing, as I know you would for me, or others here. This is so touching and heartfelt I am still weeping and I know you don't want that. I feel with you Marty and I believe she is always with you whether the wind blows or not. Someday you will be united again, and I know that doesn't lessen the missing of her now. Losing a child is, I am told the most painful event one can go through and I appreciate you sharing with us this most sad happening. Helping me to understand a little more..you are a brave lady for it takes courage to write of such. Thank you. You are in my prayers and may God be with you now at this sad time. Hugs to you and the warmest regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Martie, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I know how it feels to have such huge fires near you because we had them all summer in Colorado and I hope soon the winter front will stop the blaze! (big hugggssssss) I send angel hugs and prayers out to you, sweet friend, God Bless You and may Michelle's forest forever be protected with love, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-26-2002 10:51 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Beautiful words.. is all I can say. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
..... I have no words at this moment Martie that would do this heartwrenching write justice. Just know I am sending you heartfelt hugs. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 Martie, I'm sorry...this is so sad, so many lines I loved...the way you put words together... |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
An overwhelming tenderness in your words--and in your sadness. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hugs my friend... |
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LRbaba Junior Member
since 2002-05-07
Posts 30Dallas, Texas, |
the santa anna winds blow warm and dry and the ochred sky drips a yellow tear this is a good poem, martie ashes are still drifting |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
they say at night a fire lays down it has lain down for days ashes surround a small green thing that starts then two and I think oh how I miss you your sweet swollen brown eyes filled now with ash and blown around this wind takes it all and makes a fire again the sky is the color of a tomb and from the room the moan is calling to the moon where oh where is the pretty place where tears could weep clean and fall without making prints on face I have left you so many times pushing you from my womb the first oh how you voiced my minutes then with lines that were so simply made of love began when will I be through with missing you The ashes fall up I breathe them in and wipe them from my eyes before I realize they could be you ===================================== oh my....................... .............................. .............................. (you already know)    |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The flow was great and even without the explanation this was understood. The sorrow will never leave you, but neither will the Love. Only in the rain will the tears go unnoticed and the fire quenched, only time will cool those winds...but there will never be enough presence here to see that and perhaps this is as it should be. Bless you. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
as always, Martie, powerful beyond words and these lines: where oh where is the pretty place where tears could weep clean and fall without making prints on face I have left you so many times pushing you from my womb the first oh how you voiced my minutes then with lines that were so simply made of love began when will I be through with missing you The ashes fall up I breathe them in and wipe them from my eyes before I realize they could be you ...the most powerful of all! and of course, 'never, until you meet again on the new horizon,' will you stop missing her. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, I don't know what to say, other than my heart goes out to you. *hugs* dear one. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dear one, I knew fairly early into this where you were taking us....No, I didn't know about the winds....but I do know about little M. and I know how you remember her in so many ways...She is there, all around you...and in you...as she is with us as well.. Hugs You... BTW...another beautifully written piece of Martie's soul... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugsssss you....Peace....in awe of this... Lauren~ Deep inside the stillness |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, I feel so full in my heart right now with hurt and feelings I picked up from you through your poem. This is so heartfelt. I don't know what to say except that I wish I could hug you right now, too. I hope that you can feel all our love and hugs that we are sending to you from your family of friends here. We all love you so much, sweet friend. I know that you will always have your beautiful little girl close to you in your heart. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - a special poem remembering a very special person who made you a parent - who still is with you and at this time even a physical reminder of the love a parent has for a child - I know Michelle's spirit helps wipe the tear as her ash reminds you of all the love you have for her and she has for you and that her memory will last forever - Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is so beautiful Martie, so beautiful that I have no words; except for the ending really hit me hard. This is a keeper. hugs you Maree |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
testing new sig  [http://mysteriasmuse.netpoets.net/graphics/General/Friends%20graphics/JM1.jpg] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
trying again [http://mysteriasmuse.netpoets.net/graphics/General/Friends%20graphics/JM1.jpg] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
one more time... lol dont ya love being my test kitchen [http://karilea.netpoets.net/graphics/JM-nagshdNC.jpg] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
last time...I promise... hehehe  Woo hoo...it worked!!!!! [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-31-2003 07:10 PM).] |
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