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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Anamnesis David, you should see the trees - liquid gold striates bark in breezy fascination - and it’s snowing leaves. I catch them with my tongue. Lying on a bed of peat, straw-colored clouds pass by. There you are. It’s deceptive, this amber sky - a trick of gauzy eyes, for a blaze in the pines paints this amber canvas; you are gone. When the wind undoes my raking, I wonder what took you. My fingers grasp decaying earth, clawing for a clearing. Corinne [This message has been edited by Corinne (11-25-2002 06:22 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
When the wind undoes my raking, I wonder what took you. My fingers grasp decaying earth, clawing for a clearing. powerful image.... beautiful poem... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Ron! Corinne |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Powerful and haunting Corinne. Beautiful. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Really enjoyed this one, Corinne... Glad to see you here ... Regards, Sudhir |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When the wind undoes my raking, I wonder what took you. ~*~ Invisible answers... I won't go for the obvious and say you blow me away, but you really, really, bring silence to stand near when you write like this. The thunderous applause will follow. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhCorinne~ 'Lying on a bed of peat, straw-colored clouds pass by. There you are. It’s deceptive, this amber sky - a trick of gauzy eyes, for a blaze in the pines paints this amber canvas; you are gone. When the wind undoes my raking, I wonder what took you.' *heart-hugs* for such a beautifully written recall~ Hon, this is softly stunning~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Gentle Spirit! Thanks Sudhir - good to see your words! Sunshine - ah! You are too kind - thank you - hope you have a great Thanksgiving! Dear Marge - been wondering about you. Hadn't seen you post here for a while, although I've been in and out myself. Good to see your words. Thank you! Hope you are well! Cor |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is a wonderful haunting poem, sweet friend, and you used this word erfectly, as truly isn't life all about piecing together a jigsaw of answers in promoting peace for onself and others! It is as though the truth is always hovering in mid-air, tantalizing us, and the complete history of this justice can be recollected just with a little fervor, a little faith, and to be willing, it's all psychological! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much, into my library this goes because this is one of my all-time favorites, yay! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hi Corinne~ Thanks for missing me gal ... I am posting only in Corner Pub and Spiritual as the 'adult-language' here in many of the posts is offensive to me and a no-no according to the parents of the students I mentor ... so, hoping that some sort of 'warning' or password-protection comes into being for those of us who don't want to stumble into language we find objectionable. Love you gal ... Happy Thanksgiving to you~ Pop into Corner Pub and see me sometime~ I'll buy !  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
When you think are done raking, somehow those leaves reamain where they fell. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, this is a very beautiful poem, as is all your work, even though it is sad. Thank you so much for sharing your poetry with us. (To Marge......Friend, I've been wondering about you and missing you, too. I didn't look in "Corner Pub" for you. I will, though. I wanted to go to your website, but had lost the address.) "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-27-2002 01:22 PM).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Marge - so glad to see everything is okay with you! I'll pop in and see you sometime! Take care gal, Love, Cor |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Noah, Midnight Son and Garysgirl! Cor |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne The imagery of color and fall in this are just right for identifying the feeling of loss. Very heart touching writing! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
very interesting, well-worded, imagery-packed-to-perfection metaphor. there is much here that could be commented on, but i loved the twist of catching leaves with your tongue... the myriad of things that could be symbolized in such a simple, almost familiar phrase... much thought here, thank you. |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Anamnesis? :-) Well, the mere act of me reading this, and, making an attempt at an intelligible reply is doing just that. "am a tourist not a terrorist, don't shoot, cause we are all on a journey to God" Michak |
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