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Questions in a messed up world
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Questions in a messed up world |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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White light, black stars In a checkered sky, Life as we know it is gone for now, big black dots block my way. What would I do if I were a tree, planted to the ground? If I wanted to leave I could not, I might leave and want to stay??? Grey rain hits a colorless ground, Strange to say, It makes no sound, Life as we know,it now has stopped Why not let the rain hit the sky, While I walk upside down What would I do if I were the rain, Falling from the sky? I'm afraid of heights, but I must jump, Please let me fall forever??? For some reason I am not confused, though cats chase dogs And the moon darkens the day What would I do if I were the moon, Shineing in the sky? And why am I now starting to ryhme? Is this poetry starting to die??? streets lead to nowhere, ghosts are a common sight Are living folks Just a joke? Or am I just a lie? What would I do if I were me? If I sat here and wrote poetry? What is wrong with being a living shost? At least I can float away..... Never be normal! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).... playing with reality as is commonly accepted by most life forms on this planet can be hazardous to your health... one would not for example want a tree walking through their living room or taking a nap in your bed...and what of all the trees killed..look around you, do you think they would take kindly to the bones of their brothers and sisters being used for your comfort? I have a cat that chases dogs... seems normal to me... eclipses are regular occurances and the moon blocks the sky.... I enjoyed the read.... and the thoughts that led to thoughts, that then led to more... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Liz, I enjoyed this. I especially like: "Why not let the rain hit the sky, while I walk upside down" I like that concept. Makes me grin. and the last line: "at least I can float away" Yes, but if you do, we'll miss out of some very good future poetry from you. Interesting write, can't wait for the next. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thanks, both of you Pat- I liked that line too. It was my favorite  Never be normal! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Yes, and being a ghost, you can be ever so organic as you can see even the opaque as a poet and the transparent all at once, which so many seem to have 20/50 vision over nowadays, where only the breathing poet can delve 20/20 through this opaque and drift away! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, you are so wise for someone your age, I love it, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
A cool little mixed up write this is...And I really enjoyed the trip with you. *S* Salty |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
"Grey rain hits a colorless ground, Strange to say, It makes no sound," this part really caught my attention. very melancholy feelings. Great poetry. -Joe- |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
that really made me think. i wanted your thoughts to go on forever. interesting read.very much enjoyed, thanks. lots of love gemma xxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A nice little trip into your mind. Enjoyed much. |
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