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Ousiders Cattermole
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0 posted 2002-11-25 11:07 AM


Beyong the realm of glories walls
enthralls..................-
To which no mortal man
Besides.................-
Unlock the key
and pray.........

When the clock chimes........
sadness awakes in turn,
as if beneath her.....streets.
......the waking urn,
Burn.......burn.
beyong these walls.......

Beneath the decaying flowers
cowers.........earth,
a sun within.........silver chest
....by nothings worth,
we dying curse
our mortal.......

Alas the castle stands appall'd
.....unto its end,
Alas the sea........
fortells as it....
from glories.....
unto a desert,   ?   .

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1 posted 2002-11-25 12:27 PM




(smiles) Oh my gosh, I just love how you use punctuation in your poetry, sweet friend, the caesuras and choice of enjambments and end stops makes the piece so refreshing and mysterious like Avalon itself, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ousiders, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

WhiteRose
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2 posted 2002-11-26 07:47 PM


A wonderful poem, very nicely done.
Radrook
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3 posted 2002-11-28 03:02 AM


Very unique style!
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