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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-11-24 01:53 PM


Disillusioned
One last time
Soul on fire
Smoke in my eyes
Burning desires
Spiralling down an abyss
I'm tainted
From your illusive kiss
I should have known better
To let my fanatisies get in the way
Because I knew
Somehow eventually
I would end up this way
Lost in confusion
Running around myself in circles
Inhaling the fumes
Of my smoldering dreams
I should have known better
To even try to get close
Disillusioned
Smoke blurring my eyesight
Cynicism enshrouding
My senses
I should have known better
To have almost let myself go...



If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (11-24-2002 01:54 PM).]

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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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1 posted 2002-11-24 02:50 PM




yea well the fantasies are great, so this is
the flip side unfortunately,
personally, ill take the risks anyday.......
i liked this, it echos down deep

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2002-11-24 03:00 PM


You've captured the turmoil of emotion in this beautifully Ceinwyn ... wonderful phrasing, very much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2002-11-24 03:28 PM


Inner chaos written well...the distrust of the heart is a difficult distraction.
Good wishes from ThisDiamond

Mistletoe Angel
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4 posted 2002-11-24 06:17 PM




(big hugggssssssss) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, always embrace love even when it may hurt for love is bound to find trust in your golden heart as you are so deserving of it! (sigh) I send angel hugs of comfort your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

wranx
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5 posted 2002-11-24 08:22 PM


Appears that you did know better.
And you only...almost, let yourself go.


Very nice write Kristen.


Ed

jwesley
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6 posted 2002-11-24 09:09 PM


Almost did, but didn't...which is worse, my friend??

Sometimes either....

heart-hugs...

jwesley

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7 posted 2002-12-16 04:11 AM


nice save!
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