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a name, missed
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I will attempt, now to sleep in full sun a name, missed a heart when we chose rhetoric over love a warm body here, with me it’s as simple as lying down sometimes giving up the ghost to a name missed though, the name has changed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Some things in this world dont make sense some things you dont need until they leave you ... then they are the things that you miss. I got a hole in me now ... I got a scar I can talk about MB20 |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such resonance of an aching heart my friend...Put to pen so well. ThisDiamond |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You came through! Smiling. Thank you... |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Very interesting write! I especially liked the originality of the expression "giving up the ghost" I also liked the contrast of a "warm" body as opposed to a "cold" one. Those are usually in the morgue anyway so we have to be clear that this is not a case involving necrophilism. I also enjoyed the surrealistic touch: "....a name, missed a heart...." This is deep! What does it mean? Thanks for sharing and coming through. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Duncan, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I know this haunting feeling and I wish for love to always be your angel and never be an illusion but just an ever-present light! (sigh) I send many angel hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"when we chose rhetoric over love" wry laugh here. you do it well Duncan. quit looking into my mind, K? i might need those thoughts later!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoyed Duncan.... please come in off the porch now.... ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Your wistful puppy dog smile makes me sad, Duncan. Emoting again. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Duncan...I don't know quite what to say about this intense and beautiful write. Yes...beautiful in its pure emotion. It takes great skill to craft a poem of this intensity and power. ***Ivy Rose |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
though the name has changed.... usual good stuff Duncan... tight, well formed... sculpted thoughts and phrases.. |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
I agree with all the comments above. I'm awed by this one. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
giving up the ghost to a name missed though, the name has changed Very Impressive! |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
by any name when missed leaves thoughts unsaid and heavier hearts |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
short, simple, but touching |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
perfect! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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