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0 posted 2002-11-23 09:11 AM


Born in the wild of parents two
A child of nature, a river’s ebb.
Karelanne, this creature most fair
A love found as two children
run wild and free.

Golden hair of flowing silk,
eyes of blue that gleam in light.
Curves beyond the wildest dreams
a sparkling gem, God given sight.

So many years of laughter,
the scent of wild flowers in bloom.
A fragrance that fired the passion
of this man.

Moments shared beneath a flowing fall.
Resting on the smoothness of a hidden ledge.
The lullabye of a roaring water.
As two.....now sated....slept.

Until....
One fateful night, their giggles and smiles
shattered by a crash against a door.
Men of greed, of gold filled lust..
Men of sin, men of terror..

Only darkness came to the eyes of one so tall.
This gentle man of many cares...
Not seeing the rape, the pillage...
The shattering of a beauty's wares...
Finding only a slender shape, lifeless..
upon the steps....she crawled to there..

They took some gold, from deep the mine
They took a love, of one so fair.
They took away, this beauty fine
of golden tresses, her flowing hair.

He stands there before the open glass
and stares into the chilling night.
He stands and remembers of this lass
for whom he could not defend....
or fight....

A tear falls, as does the flow of crystal
that hides a ledge, where memories lie...
of Karelanne.

[This message has been edited by Magnus (11-23-2002 09:39 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-23 09:18 AM



Such a story, such a weaver...
continue the spin, Sir, continue the spin...

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2 posted 2002-11-23 09:42 AM




Barry,

So this was the beginning of the end.
I hope she was not that: ~once in a lifetime mate~ .... surely he'll find a new love... (?)

these poems are wonderful.... can't wait for the next.

Re: this poem...I enjoyed the description of their first encounter, the waterfalls, etc. So romantic....
then so heartbreaking... so good!

Thanks for these,
Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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3 posted 2002-11-23 09:45 AM


Barry, you are a weaver of wonderful stories..
Write on poet sir.
~Hugs~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing~

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4 posted 2002-11-23 09:46 AM


Thank You LIW....YES,  the story continues..
gives me chills,  kinda emotional for me..
gosh....such a big panzy am I...

Thanx Pat...and this ties into the other poem titled "Karelanne".    Sort of going
into their lives now...  What might I conjure up next....  Heck,  I don't know..


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5 posted 2002-11-23 09:47 AM


Thanx Nance...and big hugs to you,  enchanting one....

Thanx Magic Lady...


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6 posted 2002-11-23 03:36 PM


wonderfull.... I love this kind of write...
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7 posted 2002-11-23 05:06 PM


I seem to have come in on the middle of this story.  Going back to find the beginning now.  Liked this alot Barry.
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8 posted 2002-11-23 08:39 PM


Barry - one touching weave. Nice write Barry...

BC

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