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Martie
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Rustled Minutes

The moonset
old cotton
colored to yellow
starched and pressed
a slight pattern of age mottled into its circle

slips into the western hills
as the old oak tree rustles minutes
catching the dawn as she takes over the sky
on the other side of morning

I watch it gather the shadows
and turn his dusky face to pale

and think

capture the space between

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"The space between"...yes. Nicely done, Martie. Bob
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This is exellent Martie Beautiful imagery, I love viewing the moments through your eyes.

hugs

Maree
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I expected to see perfection when I saw the title


as the old oak tree rustles minutes
catching the dawn as she takes over the sky
on the other side of morning


Again, I was right.     
Always a pleasure to read you Martie.


I know that you can 'read' me
but can you  'hear'  "me"?

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hope all is well with you....

the poem is lovely...
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MartiSis~

'The moonset
old cotton
colored to yellow
starched and pressed
a slight pattern of age mottled into its circle'


Indeed !  Exquisite MzMoonieGirl~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Martie, your poems are always so perfect.
Thanks for sharing.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

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Very nice, Martie. Reflective - filled with nature. I love how you never let a day go by without appreciating nature.

Cor
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enjoy your read
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Took this just last night, Martie...
must have known,
you think?


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Beautiful Martie...
Your writing never fails to astound me!
~Hugs~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing~

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The moonset
old cotton
colored to yellow
starched and pressed
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Now this is a unique vision of the moon.
Very lovely writing!

Deb
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What wonder fills me when I discover the weave of thought and heart in your works.
Such a beautiful discovery. ThisDiamond
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You should have been a painter....not the
house variety either...though I am  quite
sure you could have painted a home as well.

Beautifully done Martie girl....
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(smiles) Oh Martie, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, I love it, your beautiful words always make all the bright lights illuminate! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Hi Marti,

Liked the description of the moon.

and also especially liked:

"The space between"...

So creative, you are. Enjoyed much and re-reading each time, more pleasurable.

Hugs to you,
Pat

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Martie~
Beautiful as always, my friend.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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Martie - how well you regard your surroundings and how well you express so many ways to see them - loved this - Paul
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Martie...
I think you could turn the most ordinary event into a verbal paradise with your lovely words
~ loving chipmunk hugs

Lyra

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Great images created in this write...words illuminating my screen..

...believe what your heart feels...

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Martie - a lovely thought to capture the space in between...

BC
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Sometimes the space between is all there is....or the space before, as here. This poem is beautiful, and true to the real of things.

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